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Snaggletooth's outing!



The feet, of a "looneypuss"
and the smell of a "blimp",
make a good combination
if you are a "chimp";
The ears, of a "snaggletooth"
and the nose of a "hog,"
go together like butter,
who's licked by the "dog";
Now, the "looneypuss" and "snaggletooth"
go out for a cuddle,
the ears of the "toothy" one gets
squelched in a puddle;
The smell, of the "blimp"
is so awfully strong,
that the "hog" and the "chimpanzee"
take the route to "Hong-kong"........

 

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Written September 25th, 2004

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  • cutiepie gold member
    April 17, 2006
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  • xPocketxGothx
    April 11, 2006
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  • pixelated nonsense
    August 8, 2005
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    I wonder what this animal looks like. Poor Hong Kong, they might not want it.
    Thanks for entering. Good luck!
    Kate


  • cutiepie gold member
    September 26, 2004
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    Thank you I am glad that you enjoyed it


  • cutiepie gold member
    September 26, 2004
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    You are very welcome Glad you laughed, as you say it is the best medicine ever


  • cutiepie gold member
    September 26, 2004
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    Glad you enjoyed it Be safe

  • cutiepie gold member
    September 26, 2004
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    Dont you like "Snaggletooths" in Hong Kong? Thought that was where all the great cartoonists live Bah humbug XXXXX


  • cutiepie gold member
    September 26, 2004
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    Aw... that is praise indeed I hope you have many hours of enjoyement writing


  • cutiepie gold member
    September 26, 2004
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    Glad you liked my bit of nonsence


  • September 26, 2004
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    Heheh this is a very humorous piece!
    It's great how you have created this "Snaggletooth!"

    The flow is great as well!

    best of luck
    -->aref

  • Pari Ali
    September 26, 2004
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    lol I dont know one minute I am reading your poem and the next i am taking a flight out to Hong Kong. thanks for the fun


  • Xx Alice xX
    September 26, 2004
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    Ok that is two good laughs I have had this morning. This is absolutely adorable. It just seems to carry the reader through it, it flows ever so nicely. well done, thank you for the laugh, it is the best medicine. thank you again.


  • Kristen Corpse
    September 26, 2004
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    So terribly funny. Nicely written. I like the humor in it. Very well done. Good luck in the contest. Keep up the good work.

    Much love,
    Kristen

  • SunderX
    September 25, 2004
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    Bah.... I actually Live in Hong Kong

  • battleingmyself
    September 25, 2004
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    this is a perfect fun song, the second time i read it i read as a song, i think you will teach me how to have fun with myself writing, i am going to try to write something fun, now because of you

    thanks


  • cutiepie gold member
    September 25, 2004
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    How true, they are a never ending supply of joy Happy Birthday for yesterday


  • Night Hope gold member
    September 25, 2004
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    Beautiful!!!

    Oh, my Friend!!! I hear ya!!! For my 46th birthday yesterday, there were 6 kids under the age of 9, the youngest 6 yr. old twin boys...all have very vivid personalties & wild imaginations...my god~daughter also used to floor me with the words she sang to me as a child...I have burst out laughing & also burst into tears...sometimes, the words of their Love for me are so pure...it makes me weep... ...I hear ya & then some, my Friend!!! hehehe Have a good one, Lynne!!! (I know; ya will!!!) Wanda
    Edited on Sep 25, 7:33 p.m. because ''.

  • cutiepie gold member
    September 25, 2004
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    Lol I live in a "madhouse" They keep me breathing They have wild imaginations and I am sure some of it rubs off . Many thanks for your kind words, they are appreciated


  • Dreamweaver silver member
    September 25, 2004
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    Excellent

    Very creative Cutiepie ... I bet your grandchildren have a lot of fun when they visit you ...
    This is real "looneypuss" fun stuff that kids enjoy. At times I wished I had their imagination.
    Take care,
    God Bless

    Sammy


  • cutiepie gold member
    September 25, 2004
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    Thank you I love to make up funny names for the grandchildren, so this seems to come from an inner child

  • Nicole Hanna
    September 25, 2004
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    Lol! You always write the cutest things, hence your name I imagine. Wonderful use of "made-up" words like "looneypuss". It suggests a great deal of creativity if you ask me. Very funny.


  • cutiepie gold member
    September 25, 2004
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    Thanks...suits my mood


  • blondeoverblue
    September 25, 2004
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    Lol...Totally mad, I love it !!!


  • cutiepie gold member
    September 25, 2004
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    Sort of a combination of elementary humour and holidays ....hehe

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