You have opened doors for me
Yet only the ones you have chosen.
You have given me many chances
Yet only the ones you want me to take.
You have covered my ears to protect me
From thoughts which might make me think.
You have bound my feet
Afraid that I might run too far out on my own.
You have been my teacher
So that I would know only what you do and nothing more.
Because you love me I should believe.
You were nailed to the cross for a reason.
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I changed the title of this.. it apparently seemed clashy.. Guess it doesnt matter cus I know what its about.
Written September 24th, 2004
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Now this is really fucking awesome, Ish. I really especially liked these lines ::
"You have covered my ears to protect me
From thoughts which might make me think."
You are really talented. Applause again, this totally deserves it. -
excellent
Wowwww this is a very powerful poem l love it,well written and makes you think!! love it very good -
Truely inspiring and uplifting. I loved this write and it brought tears to my eyes.
Thank you for sharing!
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I just adore the picture !
and the poem wow the poem was just amazing great job
Luv April M
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Aw...sweet poem!! I love it soo muchos !! I finalli ofund ur htingy...love the site!!
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Thankee for the correction.. that's why I love it here!
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Well this was anything but uplifting. Heavy stuff here. Glad I'm not having to wrestle with those demons... You sure got your message across and captured the attention of at least this reader. One thing, I think you want "too" in L8.
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its kinda hard for me to comment on this one...not sure if u are writing this for one religion....no offense but sounds like its about a bad boyfriend....someone who only lets u see what he wants...keeps you in check...
i believe in believing what makes u happy....if it keeps you happy, keeps you on the righteous path, gives u faith and strength...then more power to you...whatever that religion is...thats just me though...i'll shut up now...moving on....... -
I love this, It's neat how you keep the reader in suspence until the last sentence.
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Great :D
I like this. A lot. >>; ...Christians and others will want to lynch you. But it shows that... well... I won't go into it here. I think you understand, as you wrote this. It isn't even religion I suppose that you're poking at, is it? I mean, yes, but also other things in the world too, right? I find this uplifting, as I believe in giving hope to people as Jesus did, but not the entirety of the bible, nor in that pre-determined notion of God. Nor any religion. I have my own way. My OWN way, that is founded due to what I learned by stepping into the world away from these church groups. It may sound close to some things, like Wicca, or Buddhism, or Tao-ism, but it is not. It is truly mine. And this applies to all religions. ...they aren't OPEN. They don't allow the Freedom to be truly a Human and see the world and find your own way. It's hard to believe when you don't hear it all. ^_^ Bleh, I'll stop. I need not speak what has already been said. -Dan -
Thanks you steph...glad you liked it. that was what i was trying to do, to see all point of views of religion. some may take it to be spiritually uplifting, but those that understand it will know what i'm talking about.
love ya.
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Wow lisha...this was great. I love the picture and then everything you said..I don't know. Short, to a point, and I'll have to agree, that you made me feel. But you're poetry always does this for me, that is why I love reading you. (Miss talking to you!
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Very, very powerful work here, ish. The strongest I have read of yours thus far. The personal, political, even spiritual are meshed so perfectly. You really draw the reader in and make her FEEL this. Keep on writing... Keep on being... Keep on making art... penumbrapoet
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