My love, I'm so sorry I could do nothing to save you.
I will miss you desperately until the moment I die.
Your touch, your smile, the sound of your laughter.
My heart is crushed. I have no tears left to cry.
But go home to God now. Go now, and rest.
Don't be afraid to leave us alone down here.
Help has arrived. The killer has been captured.
We can live our lives now with nothing to fear.
Author notes
This is another scene from the mass graves - Saddam's numerous human dumping grounds in the desert surrounding Iraq.
More photos like this one can be seen at http://www.9neesan.com/massgraves - this poem is also posted there.
Written September 24th, 2004
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Thank you for entering my short poems contest. YOu havew written a very wonderful poem about one of the terrible atrocities of modern day times.
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Congrats on your silver trophy!
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this is such a beautifully penned poem you have here! thank you for following the rules and making me really love this piece! it really goes for the picture and it is just so emotional. thanks again! good luck in my contest!
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Thanks for the comment and for the silver in your contest. Sorry for not responding sooner. I somehow missed this message when it was originally posted. I'm glad you liked the poem, sad though it is.
Take care,
Mark
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Thanks, Lencio. This is a short one, as there is no way to follow a photograph like that or outdo it in sheer pain or poignancy. I took SusanL's advice above and sent it to the site I found the photo on. ( massgraves.info ) They posted it there. It was a great honor to be able to contribute something that perhaps a few people who lived through Hussein's 30 years of brutality might be comforted by a little. I also like to think that Hussein or the terrorists who supported him might have read it. Not that it would have any effect on them, but it would be my way of saying kiss my ass to them. They lost. Hussein's sons are dead and he's staring at a wall every day. I wish Hussein would have been killed too, and he would have been if he didn't hide in a hole like the rat that he is.
Anyway, thanks for your thoughts on this. You're right about the photo - nothing can be sadder than that.
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Hello Mark,
I was looking out for your poem on Mother, and came across this. You have a lot of these writes and I feel that you have felt and feel the same way as I do, only I never wrote on the Iraq disaster. This is so touching, and I found the beinning line rather sad. It's so sad...the picture adds even more depth, a man kissing a skull, Oh God what can be sadder than this?
Thanks for sharing this picture Mark. As always there's so much to learn from your writes.
Lencio -
good
a picture to think about
the killing -shows the end of humanity
the kiss- shows humanity still exist
the poem written in first person gives a impact to the readers mind about the theme
no heavy metaphors used here
yet
somewhere in heart it lives a effect
nice effort
keep penning
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Awesome job!
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Oh Wow
I read this and no more had dry eyes... My God, it truly makes you think and not takes things for granted. My heart aches from reading and looking at that picture, this certainly needs to addressed and so many people need to wake up and see what is going on and such the tragedy it is to read and find that this is happening and has happened. Wow... Well done Uncle Mark 
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Hi Susan,
No, I didn't think of that, but it's a great idea. I'll give it a shot. Thanks for your comments. As you know, I agree wholeheartedly.
Best wishes,
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Wow! This is powerful stuff
I am assuming that the picture inspired the poem but if not then please feel free to correct me.
Can't see the need for an overly critical response here, look forward to seeing more of your work
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Hi there -
When Ever I come across a poem like thios I have to stop. The poem has strong impact and I will say I agree with you fully here. But what I think is more impressive is the depth of your knowledge and understanding fo the situation as expressed in your comments.
I think that if our media did not suppress these pictures and the film of the beheadings and such that we would have a country with a completely different outlook on this war. How could anyone look on the pictures of the holes in the ground piled high with bodies????
Why is it ok to have exhibits of these same pictures from the Holocaust but not Iraq? Are they afraid that maybe they will offend someone??
Well I am offended by their self-censorship...
Enough rambling...
Maybe if you and Haikumonk and others keep writing these pieces someone somewhere will take notice... Have you considered offering this piece back to the site with the pics???
Susan -
I can remember years back in the year 2000 when wew first met.You were questioning the fact of God this poem lets my heart know you believe. Truely inspiring and outstanding work!!!
YFA,
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BlackKnight,
Great point and so true. Just being able to say goodbye to only the bones of a loved one is something Iraqi's haven't been able to do for thirty years, but can now. Talk about "small mercies".
There is so much backward thinking in regard to this war, and the condemnations of it always seem to ignore the liberation of the Iraqi people after three decades of horror under Hussein. Every anti-war position I've heard also reflects an underlying lack of concern for human liberty and lack of compassion for human suffering, so clarity of thought such as yours is a very welcome relief. Thank you.
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The fact that one there can kiss the skull of a loved one is, I hate to say, an improvement. Before the U.S. and its allies came in and ousted Hussein, people couldn't even do that because they had no idea where they were, and if they tried going to them, they'd be killed themselves. Total fear that completely controls the mind is a rare, but terrible thing, and when one has to live with it for over thirty years, well, I can't imagine the drain it must have on someone. There are atrocities that were committed in Iraq that we'll probably never know about, and others that, even now, are still being revealed. The grip Hussein, his sons, and the rest of their entourage had on that poor nation is sickening, and today, thankfully, most are either dead or in the custody the new Iraq and the U.S. I agree with you haikumonk, things will, in time, improve, and Iraq will be better off as it regains its footing.
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Well done Mark. These photos are so important yet they are never shown on CBS or ABC etc. Why are they so surpressed?.....
Kissing the skull of a loved one.... it doesn't get more "real" than that. Geeeeez. The suffering, the torture...... it would be endless without intervention. The evil sits in a small chamber now....... and in time, Iraq will be better off. That's my prayer at least.
children
lie on the sand
in bondage
innocence lost
without a chance
Sad... Mark..... you presented this so well. Thank you. Nice work.
Don
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Hi Chuck,
Thanks for your comment on this. As a veteran, I always value highly and appreciate your opinion on pieces relating to this war. I hope you're doing well.
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Hi Raven,
Yes, it seems the world will never run out of Hitler's, or Hitler wanna-be's. The thing I never understand is that the leaders of these countries can have a great life by being good to their people, but I guess some people can never have enough.
Thanks for your wonderful comment.
Mark
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The poem has so few words, and yet, it is so profound. I saw newscasts of Saddam's "dumping ground" mass graves when the war first started, and it moves me every bit as much now to see just a still image as it did to watch it on television when this war first started. I didn't know there was such a level of atrocity in anyone who lived in this world. But that is the price of believing that all humanity has some good in them.
This work has an undercurrent of compassion and sorrow. We will forever be tormented by these images of mass destruction--too bad that no price can be high enough to save ourselves or those we love from such tragedy.
Many blessings,
Raven Aurora
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Hey David,
Thanks for the note. I didn't change never to not but I did change the line. Please let me know if it works better.
I'm not too familiar with Xerxes. Wouldn't it be spooky if I wrote something word for word that had already been written thousands of years ago? You'd think that would happen once in a while, especially with poems like this and the perennial human tragedies that give rise to them.
Thanks, David. I hope you're doing well.
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This is actually very good, and heart felt. It is emotional and layered as good poetry should be. Small note regards meter
"My heart is shattered and my tears will never (try 'not) dry."
may tick a little better.
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Hey Gazzelle,
I borrowed the photo from this site - massgraves.info/
There are hundreds of shots on this site sent directly from the exhumations going on right now in Iraq. Many of the photos are very disturbing. However, I urge you to look through all of them. The "headwear" of the man in the photo is as common to men throughout the Middle East as baseball caps are here. Not everything is a conspiracy, and as I'm sure you know, Saddam was no choirboy.
Thanks for your comment.
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What is the price to be rid slavery, torture, rape, misery and what is the price of religion, and what is the price of freedom? The price is over one thousand lives so far and it displays itself in the beheaded. The price is the na-sayers who decry its cost and the price is the good intention but so humanity lost that daily proscribe the end of its cost. What is the price? The price is our will power to be the leader of the free. When you measure the cost, when you weigh the loss, when your efforts are unbalanced and tossed, the price is never too high... for freedom.
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Hi Jacki,
I'm sorry this photo brought back such bad memories, and I'm very sorry for all the losses you've suffered. Nobody should have to die like your friend did. If I was king of the world, the processing of murderers like that would be much more efficient. For instance, nobody would be sitting on Death Row for 10-20 years, as they are now.
Wishing you peace,
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Thanks NGR
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a touching interpretation of closure
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Yes, Sweetheart...all is well with me, my Friend...Hope the same for you...you DID honor the picture, Mark...rest assured in that...I have had many losses, many of them recent...but neither have I had to experience something THIS tragic...Bless your talented, Honest pen, my Friend... Wanda
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Touching and deeply moving, Mark. I'm glad you kept it 'short and sweet (as it were).' It makes the point so much more powerful. This is a great one, my friend. I'm glad you shared it with us all.
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I don't think there is ever an easy way to say goodbye...All cultures do it differently...Your words expressed deep emotion and it truly sounded very personal...Our world is a mess these days, not just abroad but right here at home...There are children dying daily of stupid acts of violence...Mothers, Fathers, and children loose people in their lives daily...There is no way to say goodbye but you most certainly have attempted it and done so with such eloquence. Well done my friend.
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The entire situation is nothing but sadness...so many lives lost...so needlessly. But for the grace of God go I.
'nough said.
UB
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On a different note, it is an interesting idea that we hide 'real' life situations that may be disturbing. I've often wondered if we self censor too much. Take this pic, which I personally don't find disturbing at all, yet others may. I feel people *should* see it. But that's me.
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Yes, I clicked on this too because of the warning!
But I too am happy I did. I don't even know what to say that hasn't been said already! It's shocking and yes, a tad controversial, but the true message is one of love and sorrow. I'd hate to have to endure what that man has - what if that was his wife? His child? Parent? Sibling? Excellent job.
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I agree with you 100% when it comes to the war being justified. Our troops are over there risking their lives to help keep terrorists from killing innocent people, and all some citizens over here can do is bitch and moan about the "moral injustices" of the war and of their own personal problems. No personal problems even come close to the reality of war. I can't imagine how much it hurt this man to lose someone so dear to him, but at least now he has some form of closure (if you can even say that), and that's all thanks to our soldiers in Iraq.
There is one thing, however, I must disagree with you on. You say that God simply stood by and watched, therefore doing nothing, but this is an argument I cannot accept. God gave us free will, and nothing we do will ever change that. God is suffering too, because He has to witness humans kill their brothers and sisters. It is up to us, yes, simple humans, to figure out what's right and what's wrong, to carry God's message of love, mercy and hope throughout the world and to each other. Yes, millions have been killed as a result of the free will given to us by Him, but the alternative would have been for us to not have free will at all. While no lives would have been lost through bloodshed, we would never have had lives to begin with. It's a shame, heartbreaking, that humans have stooped to the level to mass murder on so many occasions. However, it was their choice to do so, and when they die, they will have to face the consequences of their actions. Those are my beliefs.
Anyway, I've probably bored you with my droning on of all that. I found this piece to be quite powerful and thought-provoking. theGazzelle claimed that perhaps this photo wasn't taken in the Middle East--I say, if not there, then where else? The picture used for this poem should be a reminder to all of what true loss and pain is, and to enjoy and be happy with what they have. Thank you for posting this.
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The title of the poem was what drawed me to read this, which by the way is a very beautiful piece. I have had a friend brutally murdered...stabbed 33 times and his thoart cut. They didn't catch the killers for 2 yrs. But I also attended 2 wakes in 2 hrs this week so I think that perhaps I was looking for solance in your poem, I kind of just glimpsed at the pic,but when I did Thoughts of my murdered friend came to mind. Jacki
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I confess, the warning of a graphic photograph enticed me to click on this. I am glad I did. I am attracted to things such as this (like the photographs on Ogrish.com) because it shows a rarely seen side of society- the dark, dangerous side. I think the depictions shock us into wanting things to change.
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Poignant
This photo and your poem speak plainly about the survival of love after death. We need to say our last good-bye in person, and if only bones remain, so be it. It's the inhumanity in us that creates caches of bones, and only humans can stop it. Stopping the abuse of children would go a long way, I think.
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this is very well written. I love the way you pieced the poem together with the picture. Great job on this and thank you for making more people aware of the horrors that occur in iraq.
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This definitely drives your point home. Unfortunately there are many more man like Saddham , and your comment about why a father , in this case here you speak of God , could let such a thing go on....and i am with you 100% on the doubts that forever were , are and will be in my mind...I guess until my turn comes , I will never know the real or the whole truth , so i try to live my life as if there was one , however i do not belong to ANY religious affiliation , but I am a very spiritual person( and there is a big difference between the two I think , even though many people argue that point with me )
Reenie
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Hey FD,
Actually, you didn't. I changed the poem entirely. Don't worry about the points.
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Hi Wanda,
Thank you.
This poem was hard to write. To capture without cheapening is always the hardest part about writing a poem, especially one involving the tragedies of others. My first thought when I saw that photo was, "I can't imagine how that man must feel." How could anyone? But I wanted to pay my respects somehow, so I tried to imagine. I've had losses of my own, but I still don't think I came anywhere near it, because the people I lost died natural deaths. None of them were kidnapped, blindfolded and tied, shot in the head, and dumped into a hole in the middle of nowhere by some maniac.
Anyway, I gave it my best shot. Thanks for letting me know I didn't fall too far short. I hope all is well with you these days.
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Bravo!!!
God Loves a Man That Speaks the Truth!!! & I love a Poet that does, as well...you're always such a dependable Voice, my Friend...Mark, I swear, sometimes you amaze me...but then again, I'm not surprised at all...hehehe 
You are just too cool, always, on all fronts...Diogenes rests easy in the Knowledge that you are One that carries the Torch...Be well, Mark... TTYL... Wanda
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Damn it I already read this. Sorry, I will return your points if you tell me how much I wasted.
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I am not even going to comment on the war aspect of this poem. Why? Because, quite simply, there is such beauty to this piece. It's tender good bye kiss dare not compare to war. I am afraid that loss, love and war are walking hand in hand. Great job on this Mark.
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I really like this poem. I cried when I looked at all the other pictures on the link that you included in your other poem. It reminded me of Holocaust pictures that I had to look at in high school. I never could comprehend how one person could have so much influence over so many people and be able to hurt so many. But it happens. And the sad part is that most poeple dont even know about it until it is too late to save the victims. Anyway, great poem! I love it!
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Hey Mark~ this poem is inspiring. To see firsthand the callous acts upon mankind in photo and in word is truly enchanting to me. That's not to say I enjoy the pain this so called man has put upon the world, quite the contrary actually. It saddeneds my heart to think of such pain and misery. You describe this quite well.
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My statement was somewhat neutral as I'm still not sure what to make of all the things happening around the globe right now. Part of me thinks things are part of a grand scheme played out on the global stage and that all these governments are in kahoots with one another..it is always the radical few that gets the blunt end of technology to the skull. Then there is the part of me that says it is all just a case of cognitive dissonance of the national level...we know we shouldn't be killing and sending troops overseas but we do it anyways, just because we can. shrug we're still an infant nation going through the terrible twos....
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mrepoet,
Correct, but if I taught a friend how to fight so that he could protect himself, then he started using it to kill innocent people, I'd be justified in snapping his neck. In fact, I'd be the most justified because he was partially my creation. I also agree that America's past association with Hussein is an embarrassment. We should have chosen our friends more carefully.
I also have no love for the weapons production industry in America that has flooded the world with guns, tanks, bombs, even nuclear and chemical weapon technology, and the resentment it has inspired around the world to see almost every weapon stamped with "Made in U.S.A." on it. It's inevitable, ironic and possibly karmic that those weapons are now being pointed at us.
However, those facts don't detract from the nobility of our stopping the horrors Hussein and the Taliban would still be committing if we had not stopped them, and protecting ourselves and the world from more terrorism, even if it was too late for so many.
Thanks for the great comment.
Mark -
Saddam is a coward, put in place(or at least allowed to remain in place) with the help of the U.S. during the "war" against communism (we gave him ammo to fight Iran, we traded hostages for ammo to Iran to fight Iraq) which has mysteriously been replaced with "war" on terror since the Soviet Union fell. Saddam is a black eye and an embarassment to western "civilized" world and had to be eradicated, twice...lol!!!
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War is ABSOLUTELY selective killing, at least the way America and the allied forces are waging it. Otherwise, America would have and could have turned the entire Middle East into a parking lot after 9/11, rather than sending soldiers through sniper-ridden streets to flush out terrorists. That comment is a slap in the face to every soldier who has died to liberate Iraq and Afghanistan. Yes, there are civilian casualties in every war but we do our best to avoid them, whereas the murder of civilians is the ultimate goal of the terrorists.
To equate the blood on Hussein's hands with the blood on ours is totally ridiculous. Hussein routinely lined up women and children in front of the buildings he knew our military would be targeting. Our cause is just. Hussein's wasn't. We're sane. Hussein was a psychopath. That's the difference.
Thanks to liberal news media and university professors who have the luxury in their academic bubbles to believe that all killing is equally evil, many have been misled to believe that all war is wrong and all violence is bad. It's not true. There is moral violence and immoral violence. Mass murder is immoral violence. Stopping a mass murderer from killing more thousands of innocent people is moral violence.
If you could travel back in time and shoot Hitler before he had a chance to murder six million people, that would be a noble and moral action.
"Who wins at the end of the day?" Go to Iraq and ask the people who have lost their loved ones to him and no longer have to worry about becoming one of his many victims. One of Saddam's favorite hobbies was torturing children in front of their parents. Imagine that for a second. Better yet, watch a few of the beheadings at www.michaelsavage.com - then get back to me about how there is no difference between the blood on the hands of Hussein and his thugs and the blood on our own.
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A great write.. Shame that people like Saddam is existent.. Hes the human butcherer, the human scarer.. A real mean ass. I applaud you to pluck up the courage to write something like this.. I know thats a bit of a wierd thing to say, but i do think that this must of took guts.. Anyhoo a great write! well done! take care x
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ice dragon,
I know exactly what you mean. People will assume from this poem that I am a Christian. The fact is I fluctuate between wanting to believe in God and praying just in case it's all true, and believing in nothing at all and feeling that all religion is just a childish dependence on the supernatural.
I also wonder how a loving God could let such horrors occur in this world. What kind of father watches his "children" suffer and doesn't step in to stop it? I have no answers. That's why he didn't stop the murders in my poem, either. He just watched and listened, which is all he ever seems to do.
I can only hope there is a final reckoning when we pass from this world, because there sure isn't any justice down here. Ironically, that's another reason we must come together as a human family and take care of each other. Since God didn't step in and stop Hussein, America and the allied forces did. Some might say God stepped in through them, and I hope that's true. I just wish he would do things the way he did them in the Bible - bring down a plague or whatever on all the terrorists in the Middle East, rather than letting 18 year old soldiers die trying to weed them out. He's apparently an absentee landlord, so in this darkness, I'll fight for the hearts of my fellow man/woman and do my best to contribute to the light.
Thanks for reading this and for your honest comments.
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The bickering and chatter;
the why’s and what for’s,
the angry accusations
and demands for the truth,
in God’s eyes, are meaningless
beside the screams of the innocent;
where in your poem does it say War is okay when justified? War is not selective killing....therefore...innocent blood is shed..so..we sacrifice innocent blood to save innocent blood...who is the victor? if Hussein's hands are covered with innocent blood...he sacrificed his own peoples blood for his cause...so...who wins at the end of the day?
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Wonderful poem, though I took it from a far more general perspective. I think it is ind of reassuring to realize that God's justice is always there, even if man's justice fails, or rather, because man's justice doesn't always work. Wonderful work!
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Hi John,
To say that this poem inspired empathy is the supreme compliment, because empathy is the only thing that will save us.
Thanks, friend
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Hi Cutiepie,
I did not mean to suggest that God condoned the murders but he didn't stop them or they wouldn't have happened. If He is omnipresent, as all Christian's say, he witnessed it and was the only one present aside from the gunmen.
Thanks for your comment. Always nice to hear from you.
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"The importance of Hussein's overthrow" is that Hussein will not be able to commit mass murder anymore in Iraq. How does that contradict the poem? Please clarify.
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All I can say is I sure am glad I agree with you or I might duck for cover from your wrath seriously though I understand where you are coming from and your right sometimes if you dont put the raw emotion of it all out there some will never get the point.
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The poem itself is excellent!! The photo serves well to add to the impact of the theme. By themselves, they make a very powerful and convicting statement. Man's inhumanity to man has been long-used arguement to discredit the existance of God Himself!!
I'm curious, however, as to the accuracy of the statement, "Saddam's human dumping grounds." While a part of me really does want to believe that this is what the picture actually depicts, another part of me is not so quick to accept that which could be anywhere in the Middle East (like Israel, Jordan, or Saudi Arabia, for example) as indicated by the headwear of the man on the left. I don't think that you are intentionally trying to misrepresent the photo, but what empirical evidence do I have that this is so? How do we really know that the photo hasn't taken out of context? How do YOU know? How do we know someone's not simply trying to promote their political agenda?
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hmmmm....graphic pic....horrible sad story-why is it that people do this type of thing? hitler...sadaam...so many others and so many others to more than likely come along... its a horrible thought, you've done a great job with this...powerful stuff here...definitely wasn't a waste of my time...
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It is time to stand up and fight.....
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Hey Lena,
Sorry, but I'm totally fed up with all the criticisms of America and the allied forces' efforts to stop bare naked aggression by people who don't understand the nature of evil and apparently don't care about human suffering unless they are threatened personally. If it has to be personal before we'll do something about evil, we're all screwed and the human race's days are numbered.
The argument of, "Well, we didn't do anything about Sudan, etc., so we shouldn't have invaded Iraq, either" also doesn't hold water. What is the logic? Because we didn't stop every bad thing that has happened in the world, we shouldn't do anything about anything else, ever?
Then there are those who say the invasion of Iraq was motivated by personal interests, such as oil. If America wanted their oil, it is powerful enough to have taken it without war. 100% of the oil in Iraq is still owned and controlled by Iraq, so how exactly did we take it from them?
Even if our reasons for taking out Hussein and the Taliban were totally selfish, who cares?!! The good got done and that's all that matters - perhaps not to the liberals from the high cushions of their living rooms, but to the people who won't be filling holes in the desert like their loved ones did, believe me, it matters.
The current estimate of innocent Iraqi citizens who were bound, blindfolded, shot, and dumped into mass graves under Hussein's regime is 300,000 many of which were CHILDREN. The ones that have been found, that is. There are probably another hundred thousand or so that haven't been found and never will be. That fact is enough for me to know that we were right to go there, even if the ridiculous notion that we did it for selfish reasons were true.
I'm not even interested in arguing this point with anyone anymore. As far as I'm concerned, anyone who thinks we were wrong to overthrow Iraq and Afghanistan is from another planet spiritually, and the gulf between us is too large to even bother trying.
Mark -
great poem but i disagree with the saddamn overthrow bit. (its nice to have him overthrown... but st the cost of a religious war.. i dont think so!) anyway, politics aside, short but powerful piece. well donexx
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Powerful
Powerful, disturbing and so very sad - all the more for it's truth. There are many more horror's yet to be uncovered in that cloistered country. May he never come to power again
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That was really deep. The poem is very graphic it works quite well with the picture. What's sad is we all sit around every day living the good life while thousands of children are dying. I'm getting highly emotional so in closing Fantastic write. You've opened my eyes even further.
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Another thought provoking piece from a man with eyes for heart clinching pictures that inspire something more than hate. They inspire empathy. Nicely done my friend.
~ John
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wow...your words are honest and true and i thank u for this raw emotion in this short poem...the picture conveys such a message w/this powerful masterpiece...great job on this
great write
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I have to say that the comment left by Blupoetress is my thoughts as well, the final line of this poem contradicts the rest of the poem. It reads as if God condones these actions. Maybe if the last line was removed, the poem would stand on it's own merit. ( Just a suggestion)
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An extremelt powerful piece, made even more so by the presence of such a haunting, sad photograph. Well done on a great write
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POWERFUL
How true your words! In the midst of the rhetoric, nothing really matters but the sounds of death. In just a few words, you conveyed your message in a really powerful way! Excellent write! Thank you for the reminder of what's truly important
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the importance of his overthrow?
The bickering and chatter;
the why’s and what for’s,
the angry accusations
and demands for the truth,
in God’s eyes, are meaningless
beside the screams of the innocent;
screams that were swallowed
by the uncaring wind
and heard by none
but the murderers and Him.
your whole poem contradicts your final comment...but thats how i read it...
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sorry I can't read this... it's too disturbing to grasp...
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gosh that isan amazingly sad and powerfully sick picture. the writing works well too.If only the powers that be could see stuff like this.
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warn me before I read these things hun I seriously am crying I cant handle this kind of stuff! however the write makes an impact and you get your point accross very well
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