Rain running down my window
As I sit here at my desk
Thinking of the times gone by
When we were at our best
I loved you then with all my heart
You made me glow with pride
We laughed and cried in each others arms
You stood there by my side
Through hard times and through good times
Through lean years and through thin
You were there when help was needed
Together we would win
Those days have sadly gone away
Where to I do not know
I often wondered...was it me who caused our love to die
Or was it you who made our love an everlasting lie
I just have to tell you
Its right here
Inside my head...I want to say I'm sorry
For all the things I never said
A contest entry
- You're a heartbreaker by flyingphoenix.
475 points, ended June 11, 2008, 70 entries
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A great poem here. I find myself asking those same questions, you have really hit the nail on the head here.
'I liked these two lines the best -
I often wondered...was it me who caused our love to die
Or was it you who made our love an everlasting lie'
Some really thoughtful lines in this poem, a great read.
Thanks for entering, and good luck!
Sunny
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Thank you
You might notice I have re-entered this poem again..as I felt it needed a little editing....regards Dan xxx
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Indeed it helped enormously Dusty...thank you for your wonderfully perceptive remarks...I wrote this poem at a time in my life when I felt as if my whole world had fallen apart...and after my initial outrage I asked myself if there was anything I could have said or done that might have averted the tragedy...some people may not understand but I had loved my wife for over 20 years never once doubting her...so when the bombshell came it was with devastating impact!...however its almost 3 years now since those dark days and I am now divorced...thanks again for your most welcome comments on my poems...every one is valued and appreciated...regards Dan
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beautiful
now this is description with expression and emotion.....comes from the heart....can walk the path with you....ask the questions too....then in the light of day take hope in what i did have no guilt and with this poem in my heart start on the road to mend a broken heart. beautifully put and worth reading every word.....hope it helped the healing process. beautiful -
This is a nice poem... sorry for your loss and i wish you the best in the future.
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Remembering the good times during the grieving process I have found to be beneficial - eventually.
You have written a very poignant piece here Dan andd even without the knowledge from reading 'Anger' I would feel your loss through your words, Poignant poem.
~von~
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