If I look at my reflection
Stare deep into my own eyes
I can see
what you can't
the hatred and suffering
that you have created
throughout my life
Im your shattered dream
your unfinished project
My entire life you've picked away
at my weaknesses
with every word
you slowly took away
my dignity
my pride
my happiness
my sanity
I curse myself for even thinking that one day
you would love me
that one day, I would finally be
perfect enough for you
NOTHING will ever change the things you said
NOTHING will ever make it right
But I've come to realise....
your the only thing holding me down
As long as you are near
I can never truly be who I am meant to be
Im just the broken mistake you created
But you should be glad
that you can't see my true reflection
My true reflection
could do something
you couldn't even imagine .......
Author notes
blah... whatever
Not a big fan of the ending, but eh it works!
Written September 22nd, 2004
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hey marie, just saying hi and stuff...god i miss you so much! I hope things get better for you, i really do. i deffinitly know what it's like to have an asshole dad and parents who just totally don't understand how you really feel. this is a really nice poem by the way.....i miss you so much
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awesome~!~
I can totally relate, except a few parts. but still, I can relate. lol. this is really good. I enjoyed reading this. great job and keep writing and I'll keep reading,
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Why thank you my dear Ana!
-M
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My darling Marie
Yes, it seems your writer's block has been unclogged. Yay! The second stanza is my favorite...so much in so few words...I also liked the wording of that particular stanza -- hence the reasoning behind why it's my favorite! Fabulous job!
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well I did have writers block, but it unblocked!, and thanks for the comment!
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oooo, ive heard some of this poem before. and i was right, i knew that it would be good. dude, i thought u said u had writers block. *Cough*Bullshit!*Cough* so yea buddy, very good write.
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aaaaawwwwww I LIKE IT. It sounds like something I'd write to my ex... I can really relate to this one... Because it just describes the relationship we had... Anyways great write... Much love and I hope that you aren't hurt too bad...
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damn. I can sort of relate to something along these lines. NOt being able to be yourself and yeah...but good job.
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