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Love's last chance

 




I opened up and told you

 

The story of my heart

 

The damage that past men had done

 

Who’d take my love and then depart.

 


I begged you not ask me

 

As tears ran down my face

 

My soul could not endure the loss

 

T’would be my final chance at grace

 


Too many times I’d given all

 

To have love stripped away.

 

And I’d surly damn us both to hell

 

If another dared betray

 


I wept of blood and emptiness

 

Shadows from the past.

 

I begged you just to take my lust

 

The abyss of love would be too vast.

 


But you swore that you could cross it

 

That my heart was worth the fight.

 

And I danced among the angels

 

Forgot my fear of night.

 


With ecstasy I loved you

 

 It took away my breath;

 

Till you whispered “I don’t want you”

 

And called down the arctic death.

 


I screamed out in agony

 

Cursed God and all his stars.

 

Shattered and forsaken

 

Eternity won’t heal my scars.

 



Patricia Gibson-Williams

 

September 21, 2004

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I'm didn't have time to look and count, so I'm not sure if I finished this in time; but I'm entering it anyway.

Patti
Written September 21st, 2004

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  • sweetestkiss1985
    October 7, 2004
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    sad but true

    I think that all women have been here. I definetly can relate. Before I gt with my husband, I had all sorts of men tell me that they loved me and then would use me and then would dump me. This piece is so true and I think that you did a good job.
    roxy


  • bleedingheart08
    September 27, 2004
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    wow! You must have been cursed to have dated so many Mikes' lol. I loved this poem very very very much! It flowed perfectly. Word choicing was beautiful. I'm sorry that relationships havn't been the best for you. But who knows, there may be a prince out there waiting for you and who probably feels exactly as you do. He might be right in front of your eyes and you would never know it. Good Luck to you and keep up the awsome writing!


    *Heather*


  • PurpleSky
    September 26, 2004
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    This was excelent and was my fourth choice this is so heartbreaking and sad and I think the emotion expressed in this was done very well. thank you so much for entering my contest


  • AngelSeeker silver member
    September 24, 2004
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    It took me a lot more then two experiences to feel this way.My first love (Mike) cheated on me; then I got engaged (to a Mike) and he cheated on me; the night I caught him, I got attacked by a man named Mike, (no more Mikes for me) the next It took me a lot more then two experiences to feel this way. My first love (Mike) cheated on me; then I got engaged (to a Mike) and he cheated on me; the night I caught him, I got attacked by a man named Mike, (no more Mikes for me) the next guy was honest and I knew he didn't want love, but I think I still felt used. After that I got married and for 12 years he made me feel that I was worthless. Then I dated a guy only to find out later he was married. But, this was written in retrospect and the heart has a way of not listening to the mind, you may have been devastated by what you endured, but sooner or later the heart is going to start wanting again. Usually when you least expect it. Thank you for your comment. Patti


  • J Rhys Davies
    September 24, 2004
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    It’s sad how some people can take one or two experiences and judge the whole male race on them. If that were my case, I’d be single for the rest of my life. This was an excellent job of poetic flow. I am impressed.

    ~ John


  • Almighty Aphrodite gold member
    September 21, 2004
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    A masterpiece to which I can surely relate. I have decided that, after all the lies, betrayal and heartbreak, to forever freeze out any man who dare think of stealing my heart only to shatter it and declare myself an asexual hermit. I am convinced--nobody can tell me otherwise--that I am destined to be alone forever. I am sick of being seen as nothing more than a sex object; I want to be cherished, loved, respected for the goddess that I am (supposedly). But since this is never to be, judging from all the pathetic experiences I have had in relationships, I would rather walk the tundra of desolation and depression on my own accord than have another man send me to that inhospitable land.

    This is great! Good luck to you. Swing by sometime, if you please.

    Many blessings,

    Raven Aurora

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