You give me the rose,
and a golden glow infuses me.
You smile and my heart
beats
Faster because I can see
the love in your eyes.
You shower my world with color;
it blooms, I bloom, for you.
I laugh with delight at every
new, foreign sensation.
I weep with the joy of knowing
I am cherished.
The rose becomes more healthy,
more vital and beautiful.
Then the rose is thrown aside,
and I shiver without the warmth of it.
You glare and my heart
breaks
Slowly because I can see
the hate in your eyes.
You strip my world of color;
it withers, I wither, for you.
I laugh with hysteria at every
old, forgotten form of numbness.
I weep with the agony of knowing
I am held in contempt.
The rose becomes more sickly,
more lifeless and ugly.
I pick it up,
the tears drying on my cheeks,
And watch as, one by one, the petals fall
from the bitter rose.
Author notes
This was written for my sister's story. I'm very proud of it because it is the first good poem I've written in a long time. Enjoy.-Amanda
Written September 21st, 2004
In a list
A contest entry
- Broken Hearts by EmotionalWreck.
300 points, ended December 24, 2004, 23 entries
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Lol, I always get such an emotional response from you. Its flattering.
Seriously, though, thanks. I appreciate that you take the time to read my work. Love you, hon.
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this is very sad i wanted to cry. i can relate to evry sentence and every emotin in this poem. i loved it so much great job amanda
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*sigh* Yeah, the good ole days...Lol, ok, so its still good, but, yeah, I know what you mean. It does feel like that was ages ago. Anyway, thanks for commenting, babe. Loves!
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Goodness, I was taking a stroll down memory lane. Doesn't it seem like forever ago that we were conspirators on the Shaerane story? God, that was back before it even had an actual name! *Dies laughing* Wow, I feel old now.
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Thanks. I'm really glad you enjoyed it. -Amanda
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I love this poem. It is amazingly beautiful. So creative, unique and very well written. I love how you put it together and how you portrayed such emotion in it. Great Job. Thanks for entering and good luck!
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No. Actually, I wrote this when I found out that my sis was going to make something I didn't want to happen happen in her story she has on here. I was a bit ahead of the game, cuz I read whatever she writes before she posts it, and this was inspired by her story Shaerane...and just reality in love these days, I guess. Thanks for the comments, suga.
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Awe that is sad...i hope it is not about anyone impraticular...good in a sad was...nice my luv
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Yeah, me too, but thats only natural, I suppose. Thanks, babe.
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I liked the beginning better then the ending, but its all gravey
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Hey, thanks, I will. Lol, I think I'll op. to keep teasing her. Its good for her. -Amanda
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if you want to take your mind off your sisters stuff, read my dark mansion story, its ok.. and you should stop teasing her, lol or better yet keep it up.
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Thanks, glad you liked it.
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well written.
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Hmm...nope, sorry, I wasn't talking about "them." Guess you're relieved now, eh? Well, I'm not!!! I hope you bug the hell out of Kay...HER.(I'm a bit annoyed at my sister right now.) On a lighter note, thanks for reading the poem. I'm glad you liked it. And don't worry, I get distracted a lot, too. You can ask... You know who. Buh-bye.
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Hmm...a twist eh? I'm one of the fans of your sister's story, Shaerane so I'm going to assume it has something to do with Shae and Andruw. Favorite couple and all. sigh, a shocking twist...I want to know! Ah, oh well. lol This poem brings to mind a nightmarish feeling. The way it starts out good, happy and whatnot, then suddenly skies turn dark and streets fill with blood...oh sorry where was I? ahem yes well, whispers it is referring to shae and andruw right?
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Thanks. Glad you liked it. I'll try to return the favor soon.
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Wow. The contrast of:
You shower my world with color;
it blooms, I bloom, for you.
...and...
You strip my world of color;
it withers, I wither, for you.
...is just very vivid and amazing. The whole piece is very good, but I think those two points were the real highlight for me. -
OH...I almost forgot. *Does first comment dance* Thus...it is done!!
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GAH!!! *Beats you on top of the head* Don't you dare pique their curiousity! They'll start a freakin mob and I don't think BlackenedxRose can hold them all off! *Shakes head* Great writing, but I'ma beat your booty when I see you!
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