The sight of you causes my blood to stir
Loss of blood to my head makes it whir
Your heat makes me dizzy with desire
My body wanting yours it is an endless fire
There's no denying I want to touch your body all over
Put you in our favorite position
Lord you look sexy all bent over
Let me take you, passionate lust for my lover
Slow rubbing, grinding your body to a boil
Up against you grinding massaging you with oil
My hardness penetrating, so tight,
must keep concentrating
From ejaculating,
My love you fit like a glove,
the sensation of the Penetration,
your body in divine gyration,
Your divine hips in complete rotation
all arising from simple flirtation
Why is your dog watching? “Damn Dalmatian” …………
Your moans coming louder
My thrust becoming bolder
I hear you moan “harder, HARDER"
Your motions too much to handle
Careful babe, you almost knocked over the candle
So close – love n lust together
Passion unleashed incomparable to any other lover
You are mine I am yours forever
Your body leaning back against me
A hand on your chest a hand on your clit
Your body trembles as I finger your slit
Baby come to me, cum for me
Give us ecstasy
Without your love babe, I would cease to be
You cream, body shaking
I hold you, seed spilled, heart aching
Bodies holding on, panting gasping hungry for air
You look at me; your eyes themselves devastate me
But do you dare??
You lick your lips already in bliss and with a kiss you say
“MORE”
I smile, and we both know I will always comply to the wishes of
MI AMOR!!
Author notes
one of my own favorites.
Written September 21st, 2004
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I like the unpredictable dancing rhyme in this piece and the straight forwardness of the piece. I feel like the word "all" in the 7th line is unneccesary and kind of interrupts the flow, but that's just my opinion.
It's beautiful, thanks for sharing.
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Oh my,I enjoyed so much,the frenzied fornicating and the smile at the dog watching ,that took me by complete surprize yet imbued this write with a naturalness and a certain something extra ,this is a well written,fun,fiesty write about one lucky lady !Reader fans herself coquetishly....blushes then will applaud before going to check your other work....
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This writing has integrity.
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thanks for the comment, much appreciated.
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Nice
This is amazing...The more I read the more hooked I became. It reminds me of my boyfriend and I. Great write because everyone that has someone can somehow relate to this piece!
I loved it!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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LoL VERY hot VERY sexy and VERY funny.
The line
Why is your dog watching? “Damn Dalmatian"
Oh the hillarity of dogs
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Nice work Louie!!
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Rigth on the part
OHHHH...so sexy and lustfully created...You share the heat,the bitch, the groan and the moan...creative indeed. -
i can see that poem unfolding in front of my eyes... and i have only one word to say to you... BRILLIANT.
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This is romantic maturity at its best , gives feeligs to unwind.....hail art...
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oh well now, i love it, i kinda feel sorry for my husband right now, kinda think he might be in trouble... hahaha. i think i need to get out my thinking cap and maybe try my hand at writing one, i love reading ones that are so visual, good job and write some more.
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great
These poems about love and lust are just the greatest! I liked your poem very much. thanks for sharing your intensely personal writing with all of us here. I enjoy reading writing that is a bit lighter than the usual heavy doom and gloom that can seem to dominate this site. this is a great outlet for all types of energy. your writing proves this to be true. happy new year. best of wishes to you and yours in the new year. peace always in all things. good luck with the contest. -
Very Sensual
OMG!!!You are a very passionate writter, and you have done this well, with all the erotic class needed! The poem is composed well, it read smooth~~~~~Great job! Ennovy -
It is just a melody and music of the love through and through.The thoughts are very plesant and bringing the feel of the great joy.The beauty of the write lies in its flow of the love which is flowing here and there in each world too.The impact of the poem is very pleasant and very slick too.I really appreciate this work.prbhudayal khattar
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After reading this piece 3 times I must admit it is by far my favorite of your 3 entries. It has left me more breathless in the completetion of its read each time. The tenderness within your words swell and spill over with a love deeper than I have seen from anyone person in a very long time. The desire and lust for your love is an evident blessing here and the passion within the words just paints an amazing fiery visual in the mind not to mention the body.
A true work of art!
Blessings
Bel -
This one is my favorite of all the ones i have read of yours. These lines:
"So close – love n lust together
Passion unleashed incomparable to any other lover
You are mine I am yours forever "
and this:
"You cream, body shaking
I hold you, seed spilled, heart aching
Bodies holding on, panting gasping hungry for air
You look at me; your eyes themselves devastate me
But do you dare??"
love n lust together, desperation, daring....heart aching...wonderful. You have captured the true essence here: Love and Lust combined into a Holy Miracle Matrimony of one....Wow.
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Ooooh yeah...sexy, baby...sexy!
Very nicely done! it's quite sexy and I had to fan myself, also! Whew!
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I smiled when you said loss to blood to your head since I knew where the blood went. Sorry but minds sometimes work that way. Wonderful write.
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OH me oh my!
The visuals you create surely do stimulate.........clears throat........the mind. OK, ok and the body too. You certainly do know how to leave one breathless.
Blessings
Bel
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Oh my, Oh my Ohhhhhhhhhhhhh... sigh~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
this well, worked for me -- ahem, in more ways than one, yes, oh, this... a wonderfully honest sensaul, erotic poem with a touch of wit and vivid and puuls in the reader and is quite a write, sir!
Now, ahhh, it also worked to, hmmm...how shall one put this?
well, it worked in other places as well...ahhhhhh, mmmmmmm....
AND ! you can see from the comments also, oh I believe so...yes, I, whewwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwww...
sigh...felt this, indeed, shall I say it is arousing?
ahem, sigh, exhale...
Wow!
okay, now, best to you in Round Two!
you've turned up the heat, indeed, mmmmmmm....
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well don't stop here i'm sure i have a few more that'll work for you
thanx for the comments, tis appreciated
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I just read your two chapters and now this. The descriptions and mood are working here. Very good writing.
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Captivating
Oh can you say Meltdown... this lit up the room with such intense passion that it leaves me in awe! Sizzling piece!
Nicole -
you're right, a spanking in there would've turned the heat up a notch...maybe i'll revise if i can find a way to fit it in there... thanx for the comment
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lol nice hot sexual, sensual and a good write! Just one little kinky comment - if she is already bending over at last spank her once! *shrugs shoulders* o well a good poem, Thanks for entering !
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One thing, I loved this, BUT, the 'u' at the end completely ruined it. It sort of made the maturity level drop a notch.
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definitely the best ive read from this contest so far. its one of those raised-eyebrows-shocked-it-was-so-damn-good kind of poems. good luck in the contest.
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nice job. this was really sexy i loved it. i havent read anything quite like this before, it is so sexual and loving at the same time. i liked the part about the dalmatoi. lol. good times. keep up the great work and ood luck in the contest.
love you always,
april -
his is so hot, I am steaming,
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Woah! Too hot in here for me! I'll cum back later when you're not so busy!
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you can have all you want!!
i'll gladly do anything the nurse says...
candystripers!!yummy lol...if u like reading this, hopefully you like writing too...maybe u could enter my contest?
would be appreciated, have a good day!
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WWHHOOAA! I feel like I was just, well- um, ya know! Damnit man! That was great! Thank you, may I have another?! Peace...Syah
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This has everything needed to make it one of my favourite writes, it has humour, god knows we need that sometimes even when love making, it has passion, a definate must, it has raw emotion... Definately one of my favourites... I will bookmark this for future reading.............Loved it...............
Hugs and Love
LindaXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXX
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Hot...Spicy...OMG FUNNY with the damn dog! ROTFLMAO at that one! Well done here. Great rhyme schemes and good flow. I can see why this is your personal favorite...it may be mine too!
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Very impressive! An excellent job of writing! The rhythm of the words matched the rhythm of what was happening. Great job!
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wow, nice it gives me blissful reminders of the other night with my baby. good job.
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Phheeeeewwwww..runs for a towel..is it just me or is it hot in here?...Such a difference between sex and making love..a great passionate difference..I love this, it stinks of sensuality and oozes emotion at the same time..brillaint work babe..
Well done..
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This poem is filled with hot passion. This type of passion is for a couple that are meant to be. This poem is so sexy. Love the words.
roxy
aka- rebekah
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Oh, dear!
Oh dear! I think I walked into the wrong room.
Backs out,
um, sounds like you guys are having a good time!
Closes door.
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thank you...i'm so glad you enjoyed this. appreciate the comment.
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Great poem! Awesome way to get your feelings out in poems! Especially erotica ones! Great job and keep it up!
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thank you for the comment
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Great
This is an amazing poem, and your feelings are beautiful...
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I didn't forget to read this...lol. I did and was a tad speechless and hot is all...
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Hmm... not bad I had to laugh when I read the line "come to me, cum for me" That's great lol. I usually read erotica from the girl's perspective just because that is the majority of gender who read my poems. Good job.
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Now if I had such an inspiration, then maybe I'd try to outwit you in an ensuing battle of erotic fantasies, lol... but I haven't been touched this way in quite some time now, and the romanticism in me that was once able to appreciate and praise a work like this has long since been snuffed out. You write with a contemporary elegance that definitely sounds the part of most young men these days, with a higher component of tenderness. I really like this poem... shit, if it wasn't so damn cold in this library, I'd attribute my shivering to an aftereffect of having read this poem...lol
Wish there were someone to make my erotic desires come true...
Great poem. Love the screen name, as well.
Many blessings,
Raven Aurora
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TANTALIZING
why havent i read this before?? i like the rhyming thing u got going on there and i need to ask u..have u been invading my dreams again? u need to stop that and make my dreams a reality ...
love it babe
kay
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*fans herself* Wow,I feel like I am inside the poem. Lovely and touched on some of my own fantasies. Wonderful job!
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Hmmm. I really like the ideea behind this, however, as previuosly mentioned, not every poem must rhyme. I am guilty of writing mostly in rhyme as well.. The beat to this is lovely, however, some of the rhyming seems forced, or canned. However, again, I do like this, and I'm off to see thw wizard.. or perhaps just read some more of your poetry. ~willow
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mmmmm oil and bending over, haha i see we have alot in common, it was tight!
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*laughs softly* amazing... why do we have the same fantasies? lol... awesome job... you've got a gift for rhyme. But remember not every poem rhymes anywho... this is really good hun. *wanders into a cold shower* wish to join? lol kidding
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"yet it still skirts around the sleezy aspect that so many other writers include" is this good or bad??
thanx for commenting...it really is appreciated.
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you share a secret and so much more... nothing i can say... but the words are all there... ~Dragonia~
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It has indead increased in degrees around here. Very hot, great erotic write.
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