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God Breathed (Eve’s Plea)

 

God made us in his image.

 

Perfection never was his plan;

 

So he gave Adam ambition

 

As he breathed, into the man.

 


From a rib he fashioned me.

 

And with his life giving breath;

 

He bestowed a thirst for knowledge

 

That would surely lead to death.

 


Then he placed us in the garden

 

With the tree, the fruit, the snake;

 

Forbade us to consume

 

The knowledge there to take.

 


God; who could have made us perfect

 

Could have left temptation out.

 

Do you think it a mistake?

 

Is there really any doubt?

 


You say that I was cursed

 

But how could I resist the tree?

 

God breathed in such compulsion

 

And we had eternity.

 


Adam did not renounce me

 

Of this there’s no dispute

 

For his need was just as heady

 

So we tasted of the fruit.

 


Forever I was branded.

 

But God breathed, and longing fanned

 

Did you ever think that falling;

 

Might have been just what he planned?

 


So before you blame your loss

 

On my weakness and a snake

 

Just remember that God Breathed

 

And he knew that I’d partake.

 




Patricia Gibson-Williams

 

September 21, 2004

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Just something I've been thinking about for a long time...
Written September 21st, 2004

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  • Thomas Vaughan
    September 25, 2004
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    excellent

    though I do beleive our veiws of spritiuality may be differnet, this write was supreb, I have often thought that God ( he, she, the one great mystery) did it on purpose. , but that is another discussion, great job..


  • Corpsegirl
    September 21, 2004
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    think piece?

    great poem, i like the part that say's do you ever think that falling might have been just what he planned? awesome write


  • Lyrical Soul silver member
    September 21, 2004
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    OMG, this is awesome!!! Fantastic job here! I'm really impressed. I was actually working on an Adam and Eve piece. I think I'll let it rest for now, this one is wonderful!! I love the way you ended it with the "don't blame me" part. Awesome, just awesome!

    ~Lyrical


  • nike gold member
    September 21, 2004
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    This was wonderful. I am so glad that God did choose to make us imperfect. If we were all the same wouldn't we be a race of robots? I like diversity and I love your poem.

  • pozo
    September 21, 2004
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    Wow- this was an amazing poem which I liked a lot, I liked the way in which you told this from Eve's point of view, I have a very early poem called 'From the Serpent' which does it from the serpent's point of view, but I feel I liked this one better- it had wonderful persona, depth of character and great rhyme. An amazing poem, wonderfully written, keep writing because this has shown me your fantastic talent

  • the chase
    September 21, 2004
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    That's a view on what really happened that not many people see. Most I know blame Eve, it's all her fault. I love the views in this, how God gave her the fire and curiosity to take of the fruit.


  • sarahbean
    September 21, 2004
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    this is truly awesome. you never hear of eve's perspective on the whole forbidden fruit issue, and this one really gives it to us full-bore. great work!


  • elisabeth0129
    September 21, 2004
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    This was an awesome piece. Such a unique way of looking at this, it really made me think. The content was new and fresh. The flow and format was excellent and it was just a great piece to read. You did a great job. Thanks for sharing.

    Elisabeth

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