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Hob-goblins

Beneath, the dark and gnarled oak tree,
a goblin sat and played with me,
he showed me tricks, of which he'd plenty,
given him by oh... maybe twenty,
 
Faeries, elves and pixies too
unicorns tricks, they all accrue;
They taught me how to fly at night,
but only if there was no light,

Hob-goblin spells, I learnt to utter
faerie chants I learnt to mutter;
Pixies, Elves , so deft of hand,
taught me how to give commands;

Now, I chant and often mutter,
all those words they taught me stutter,
gently upwards playing games,
with my friends......I'll name no names

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A little something for children....
Written September 19th, 2004

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  • cutiepie gold member
    September 22, 2004
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    Thank you I am delighted that your children enjoyed it

  • Nicole Hanna
    September 22, 2004
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    I read this to my kids and they got such a kick out of it. There's nothing like being young and still believing in things like elves and pixies and hobgobblins. You've a real talent here, being able to grasp on to those beliefs and write them with such beauty and fun the way you have.


  • September 22, 2004
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    Awwwww, absolutely adorable. The thing I love about mother goose rhymes is that they are a child's first introduction to poetry. As anyone can tell you (if they know me) I'm not very responsive to deliberatly rhyming poems, however, a child's poem is a very different thing. The purpose of a rhyme is an enabler for memory. Mother Goose rhymes do so because of the memory factor. They are usually a child's first introduction to poetry. In my humble opinion, you have done true justice to old Mom goose, as well as Shel Silverstein in the writing of your poem. I did enjoy it, (myinnerlittlegirllovedit) and it is apprapo??! for the season! Nicely done! And although it did rhyme, it was not obnoxious... Thanks for a flash of childhood halloween!

  • cutiepie gold member
    September 21, 2004
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    Thank you I shall certainly be on the look out for Black-phoenix's poems
    Edited on Sep 21, 2:12 p.m. because ''.


  • Musical Anomaly
    September 21, 2004
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    That's cool. I think it's suitable for the children you've written it for. It's the type of poem that makes you want to draw creatures. Well done. If you like this, try poems by black--phoenix, she's really good but I just wish she would write some more!


  • cutiepie gold member
    September 20, 2004
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    Thank you fellow wench I am glad you enjoyed it


  • cutiepie gold member
    September 20, 2004
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    Thank you I am glad it matches the "Ale"


  • powerslave
    September 20, 2004
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    Marvelous

    I drink an ale (yes, an ale, I'm a real man ) called Hob Gobblin, and it is marvelous. This poem surpasses it though. It was great. I love a nice fantasy poem, with mystical beings in it and the like. That was great, well done

  • cutiepie gold member
    September 20, 2004
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    Thank you, I am always pleased to bring out the "Inner-Child" I believe we deny ourselves that pleasure, far too often Thank you for your kind words, they are appreciated

  • cutiepie gold member
    September 20, 2004
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    Thank you I had great fun writing this and I am pleased you also found amusement in it Many thanks for your beautiful words


  • artis
    September 20, 2004
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    i have peeked beneath many a mushroom and found vacancy abounds, and under logs and in fairt meadows circled in yon woods, and late at night in full mooned walks and yet discovered elves or fairies dancing at my feet. I have known goblins and been hobbled by their tricks in times of war, and sorrow and cynicism. but I do find elves in the gleam of a two year olds snitching candy with a giggle an offered bag, or in the dance of a toddler in the dust bunnies the sun reveals
    i see a tiny fairy delighting in it's home....Artis


  • Wolf of Night
    September 20, 2004
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    I find this poem most enchanting and highy entertaining and adorably to cute. Vivid Imaginative and vibrant are the pictures you painted in my mind this day. Glorious piece of work I enjoyed it so much thanks for brining out my inner child once more.


  • onerios13
    September 20, 2004
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    Awww..CUTIE! This was utterly ADORABLE! You did such a fabulous job here, guaranteed to delight both the young and the young at heart! I loved this! It had faeries and pixies and goblins OH MY! lol You should really consider entering this into a children's story or poem contest...heck, maybe even get it published! Really, I found this to be enormously charming and supremely cute...lol. Very excellent job.

  • sweatingbullets
    September 20, 2004
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    Aww...tis nearly unbearably cute! I love it Very heartwarming, actually...the lighter side of fantasy. Nicely done!


  • cutiepie gold member
    September 19, 2004
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    Glad you enjoyed it my friend


  • cutiepie gold member
    September 19, 2004
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    Many thanks for the correction, it is appreciated I am glad you enjoyed this poem


  • September 19, 2004
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    o i lov you i lov you i lov you.
    you are eally so good.
    this is great.
    you got it all going on its superb.
    you really make me smile.


  • Hoosierpoet silver member
    September 19, 2004
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    Remarkable poem - one I am sure all young people will enjoy - as well as those of us still young at heart! I find this poem most enchanting and highy entertaining. Keep up the good work!!!

    Hoosierpoet
    Edited on Sep 19, 9:02 p.m. because 'take a sentence out'.

  • cutiepie gold member
    September 19, 2004
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    Yes, rhyming I find very hard, so I practice not always a success, but it's another form of which I am interested Many thanks for your kind words, they are appreciated

  • TotalChaos
    September 19, 2004
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    hey another nice poem was this another expirement or not? but anyway your poems are great you honestly have talent that i wish i had

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