Cascades by lordoftherings at All poetry

~ by Gregg Rowe ~

I rise
close my hazel eyes
to escape into
your steam
your wetness
bathes my skin
warms my blood
awakening me

I sigh
in excitement
feel your heat
envelope my body
soothing - massaging
my muscles
as drops of warm
moisture cascade

I escape
into excitement
ecstasy written
upon my relaxed face

Softly she enters
the bathroom
hands me my terry cloth robe
asks me
is there any hot water left?

Author notes

I just love the feel of a warm shower with the massage button on.
Written September 19th, 2004

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Twisteddolly
March 25, 2006
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I agree with one of the comments above me, this piece could have gone in so many directions! I enjoyed reading the way it did, the ending was cute. Thank you for entering.

Jessie
iwishuponastar14
July 15, 2005
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i love this write..funny..good!
HeavenScent4U
February 19, 2005
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This is an excellent piece of writing. Excellent imagery on top of the background and picture you have added to it. It all fits together so well. You are very good with your words, they seem to flow so easily. I think after reading just this one piece that I am going to add you to my favorites and anticipate reading more of your work. Excellent job. Be Well and Be Blessed. And yes, by the way, who is "SHE" and, did you happen to leave the lady some hot water? If not, you should consider doing so the next time. LOL!
Mari Goes
November 20, 2004
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No better place to relax then under the shower, which I prefer so much more that a bathtub (which I don't have anyway )
I really liked the twist in the ned, well, it was a twist for everyone here who thought to get 'something else'.
Very clever and creative!
Well done!

Hugs,
Mari
candy177
October 9, 2004
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I miss taking a real shower. This tiny apartment that Ice and I live in only has a bathtub, neither one of us has actually looked at the faucet to see if we could change it to a shower! The relaxing properties of a shower are endless. I swear, when I was in NH visiting my little boy, I stayed at my father's house and took perhaps 30 minutes to an hour just standing there, basking in it. Nobody was home, so they wouldn't complain about wasted water...I used to take five minute showers unless it was just to unwind, so even a half hour was a stretch for me! Love the picture. This had my blood pumping, waiting for what was to come later....
lordoftherings
September 23, 2004
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Tina: Thanks for picking up on that error for me, I really appreciate it. After you read them so many times you miss them and I really appreciate the extra set of eyes upon my works. Have now corrected it. Gregg
Ava Noire
September 23, 2004
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mmm me too. You made me want to go take a shower although I just had one! great descriptions Gregg. You have "baths my skin," where I believe "bathes my skin," should be.

Its like a thousand tiny fingers massaging all the aches, pain and dirtiness away making you pure and beautiful

thanks for your entry.
lordoftherings
September 19, 2004
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Leo: I have to smile at this comment, imagining you sitting at your computer, hand on a mouse, inching your way towards the title and thinking about whether or not you should click on it while wondering what you might find behind that click. Heheheh, sorry just being comical! Gregg
Edited on Sep 19, 11:53 because ''.
NJSem
September 19, 2004
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How Funny! At my house if you turn the hot water in one bathroom while someone is showering in the other, they immediately get a burst of cold water! AT least the terrycloth robe is warm. lol
cherche -d -ame
September 19, 2004
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Oh , I can relate , there is nothing worse than a hotwater hog At my house I go into a real tizzy if there is not enough left , so I always make sure that I take my shower/bath at times when noone else does......i.e a wakeup shower in the morning, and a luxurious bath right before I go to bed . And do not touch MY soap, MY shampoo and conditioner , and under no circumstances ever touch MY towel
Reenie
leo2
September 19, 2004
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This could have gone so many different directions. From steamy erotica to classic love. The ending had me laughing.

Sincerely,
Leo Long
Maatkara
September 19, 2004
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Hehe! Well done! Hey, you swiped my picture!

~ G
misselaineous
September 19, 2004
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Gregg: you disappoint me [only kidding] ~ is there any water left indeed! lol! i was waiting for something far more saucy as i scrolled down the page
what a wonderful ending to a poem about an everyday routine which you have painted with lovely imagery. I can relate because I love the effect that water has on me - it's where i touch my subconscious and i often have my best ideas whilst laying in the bath ~ not a pretty sight i hasten to add~ but i do enjoy...
take care
elaine
Xx Alice xX
September 19, 2004
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There are only a few feelings better in the world. And those feelings aren't as reliable as my trusty shower. Feeling the water run off of my hair, down my back. OK, shower time.
layla.
September 19, 2004
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me too. i love it all the time. hey this was really cool(or warm, hot, lukewarm?).lol. i enjoyed it!!!
~~ille
JesSiCa RabBiT
September 19, 2004
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I love this, it begins very sensual and calming and could be anything, the soothing words of this piece just wash over you, calming you into a blissful relaxation as you read it, I will definitely be bookmarking this as a poem to read when I am stressed out. This is a wonderful piece and I especially loved the last line "Is there any hot water left" it's almost quaint but not in the least part mundane, a very sweet and soothing write which i love, well done! <3
wishintreeUK
September 19, 2004
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brilliant imagery!
A brilliant poem Greg, who would not enjoy such a tantilizing luxury, your imagery is very strong through your penned words, I feel as if I have just taken a thoroughly relaxing shower. Well done! ~Katie~
lordoftherings
September 19, 2004
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Sugarsick: Thank you for catching that at the end, I had corrected it on my handwritten poem but just typed it quickly and was still thinking before rewrite. Appreciate it and thanks for the comment. I will be returning the favour as soon as I finish up here with my last poem for the evening. Gregg
Edited on Sep 19, 2:44 because ''.
sugarsick
September 19, 2004
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Very good job of turning a simple shower into something much more sensual and certainly not mundane. One thing, though- who is the 'you' being spoken to... the switch from speaking to the shower into speaking to another person is a bit confusing.