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Static Melodies

Static Melodies

A sole task
Lost in complex swirls
Shut out
And
silent words
pour from my lips.
But what use are
words these days;
A meaningless action
rubbing into open wounds.

If I should traverse the static
waves to your memories,
Will your soul remember
Who I am, Alexander?
Can your heart remember?

So many moonless nights
staring, burning holes into
my ceiling.
A faint wisp of a melody
long forgotten;
your voice caressing
(Sing to me through the haze.)

I learnt your lessons, Shadow.
The anguish and heartache,
Whispered softly in my ear-
Showing me you’d always cared.
But I have not left-
Here I stay and always, waiting-
Still I can hear your voice
(Singing sweetly).
Wherever I may be,
I strain and hear you-
(Always singing to me).

-morgana

Author notes

Hmm well this is the first time I really tried emulation. I've done it before once, but I didn't really stick to the original version. This was tough but interesting. I really had to get my own interpretation of it worked out before I could even begin writing my own version. It isn't my best; I realize that, but I think it's because I just need more practise at emulation. Hope you like it!
Written September 18th, 2004

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  • Morgana
    September 29, 2004
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    I'm glad you liked it. Emulation is when you try to rewrite a poem in your own words, but you still sort of keep to the original...at least: that's what I think it means lol!

    -morgana


  • painted veil
    September 28, 2004
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    I enjoyed the description of words in the first stanza, well done. you kept a few things very similar to my original, but still overall, i was very impressed with this work. i smiled at the- can your heart remember?- line, well written, right to the point. kat


  • Dark-Princess
    September 28, 2004
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    I thought it was well written and interesting to read.I do not know what emulation is either though..lol..What ever it is; I think this is very good and I am interested to learn more...Thanks for sharing~ Good luck in the contest!
    Dark-Princess


  • Th3DarkRose
    September 26, 2004
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    hey.. i liked it.. it was great.. tho i really dont know what emulation is.. (in the sense of poetry) it seems like u have done ur best.. and worked ur hardest.. and all u need is practice before u can get better.. congratulations.. and keep up the work.. i know one day ull get it.. and when u do.. ull write a great one..