Conceived in the wet womb of mystery
yet birthed into this limited existence
Your vulnerability so glaringly obvious
that thou art left far too fearful to cry
lest the salt of your tears be perceived as just seasoning
to those who wouldst devour your worthy essence
The sun of thy being radiates red hot
creating within thee a torturous thirst
for the moon's pale helplessness to halt the invasion
of shadows within thy seemingly lost soul
Thus here you find yourself being held captive
in the fleshy prison of your own longings
as the decaying bone marrow in your feet
propels you onward...seeking a short way home
Thy death and birth cries fill the cosmos with echoes
which will in eons furtherance burst into life anew
as the star that you are in vitro
Author notes
Written September 18th, 2004
In a list
What think ye of this revelation?
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WOW! Amazing write
Loved it 
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Wow there is a lot of big words in this ! It is very striking and unique I think. The flow is very good too.
thank you for entering
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I think your poem is pure COSMICROSE & should stay just the way it is....a perfect work of art.
Deena
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This is a gorgeous write. The blackeness of space is a womb from the millions of cosmic bodies... stars are born and die... and each time one is born the possibility is that it may be a supernova... like our Sun... there is a possibility that lifeforms may emerge from that life as well. I find this poem to have deep underlying meanings. It's very smooth and I wouldn't change a word of it.
Best wishes and
s....~genielassie~
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This is so beautifully written and your background and picture only serve to enhance that...Your imagery is so calm and almost musical in the way that it lures you into the read...I feel that this piece is perfect as is and I wouldn't change a thing...To condense this would rip the very heart from its being. JMHO
Tory Lin
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Each ornamental was planted for a particular effect and reason in the space of this write. For example... a wet womb is a fertile womb and life in the physical flesh does not take place without the element of water. There is an underlying flow of symbology throughout the write depicting the four elements (earth,wind,fire,water) of this physical realm in which we find ourselves. YET... what we are evolving into transcends these elements transforming into something SPIRITUALLY STELLAR.
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Fills me with empathy...loves it...A++
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I feel every word of this!!! wonderful!!
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This is very upbringing. Great job!
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Excellent
This was exquisite...The birth/rebirth is always a magical moment in our universe. You have managed to capture the purity and flow beautifully
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What a deeply inspirational poem from start to finsih! There is so much here mys sister, so much to contemplate. Very uplifting indeed! CONGRATULATIONS ON THE SILVER!!! Exquisite, taking me to greater heights.
MAY ALL THE BLESSINGS OF THIS SEASON ENGULF YOU AND YOURS!
and HO HO HO 
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This is very nice work indeed and if I am any sort of judge- sadly for you I'm not, this should be looked upon as the classy and strengthening entry that it is- well done and good luck
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great poem, very well written. I usually get lost (not in the good way) in poems where there are too many big words and too much description, however this was great, it kept my attention. Good job here and Thank you for entering my conest. Good luck! -
What divine poem you have penned Rose! I have to agree with every else, (Huffs! Dammit, I hate being like everyone else!) this is very captivating. It certainly has that calm, tranquil, serene feel of just floating on clouds and letting everything go. I am so proud of my sister wench! Good luck in the contest sweetie!
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Excellent!!
Good Poem Rose; an excellent mixture of quantum timelines too; an exhortation to understand the interconnectedness not only of us all, but of all things!! -
That's what happens when one recognizes their own divinity... it gifts one with the perverbial "Peace That Paseth All Understanding" So it is written... so mote it be. Thank you for your delightful commentary indeed
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Wow... sigh. This was so beautiful. It just radiated loveliness from every angle in every way. You have some definitely talent all your own girl. And you know... that background is really quite hypnotizing. lol. Makes me feel all serene just like the words of your poem do. Serene just doesn't happen often for me, so kudos to you for succeeding at what many fail at. lol. Lovely work. Truly beautiful.
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this is really deep and inspiring. It gives me ideas. I love your use of imagery and deep emotion. God bless you
Rose
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This is a really amazing poem! I hope your star will shine forever!
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