I look into those eager blue eyes I see a pure and innocent image of my self.
I kiss your cherub-like cheek.
You laugh.
It sounds like a symphony of angels singing to a kind and loving God.
I watch you grow and wish that time would cease.
I ask for a hug and you run at me with chubby arms flailing about.
And as we make contact....
In that beautiful...timeless moment..
I feel a love so perfect and exhilarating that it would make all of heaven jealous.
And any hate or fear that I might have had slowly finds its way back to the hellish womb from which it was spawned and is replaced with harmonious feelings of courage and prosperity.
My love.
My son.
Your are the only thing that I have ever done right.
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I commented on: The last time I saw her; Claire; friend
Written September 17th, 2004
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Bronze trophy winner
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There are two things I love about this piece. The first is the emotion behind it. I have 3 very little ones myself, and I could not imagine my life any different. They truly are my guardian angels. Secondly, you wrote this on my birthday P But that's a more selfish reason LOL. The background is beautiful! The only think I did not like, is the font colour, but there really is no way around that! Overall, you did a wonderful job! Thankyou for entering my contest, and Good Luck!
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This poem is almost as beautiful as the chubby cheeked little one you write of. He's gorgeous. I can feel your love leaping off the page. Nothing says love more than having your little one in your arms and hearing their laughter. Again this is beautiful
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lovely
this is a very warm and emotive poem poem, i think you must have done other things right. but i agree the most important thing is your chldren..if i had all the money back that my duaghters have "borrowed" off me i could buy the isle if wight..but i keep giving and giving and i don't want it back cos i love them too much....i know where you are coming from.....keep chiilin, keep cool, keep groovin.......eric
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I would like to think my daughter feels this way about her son, she appears to. He is 4, blonde and blue eyes, you guy is the living end and I can see him at 5 now! What a smile to go with the eyes, excellent write. Blessings.
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your son is kute and this poem is hear touching good job!
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That's an adorable child!
Your poem was nominated to enter my contest, The Best of Allpoetry. If you'd like to check it out, you can find it at:
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Thanks for pointing out the typo..I changed it
! Thanks to everyone for all the lovely comments. Yes, I love my son more then anything. He is all I really have. My very own "mini me"!
Plus, Look how cute he is. I difinately know how to grow 'em!!!!! -
Your love for your son comes through so powerfully in your poems for him. I was very touched by this.
One typo, I think - in the line "for which it was spawned" - shouldn't that be "
"from which . . " Maybe I'm reading it wrong. Anyway, this is another beautiful tribute to your son. I'm sure they'll mean the world to him when he can read and understand them.
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ahh your peom is so nice you most really love your son and why not hes beautiful ahh lovely poem x eire chick x
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wow, this is beautiful. You sound like a great mother. I wanna be a great dad someday. SOmething I didn't have. I dont know if that means that i relate to this or not, because I dont have a child yet. I guess Im just saying that someday I hope I become a loving parent like you someday.
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very touching and beautiful I loved the last line and you have a real handsome young man there
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Awwwww!!! This is soooo beautiful!!! I loved it. Very sweet. Reminds me of when my son was a baby. Ah that sounds weird. Hard to think he's almost 2 already. Boy does time fly by. Thanks for entering. I really enjoyed reading this. Keep up the great work and best of luck to you in the contest! Take care!
~Cherie
PS. By the way you forgot to write the choice number inside your authors comments, along with a certain word to verify that you read the rules. I would hate to pass up your entry because you didn't complete the rules. The contest ends tonight. I will check back then. -
I have felt (and still do) this way twice! It's a perfection in love that is not felt in other type of love. Unconditional- pure and complete. Lovely sentiment,Lady
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this is a great write. very beautiful and caring words you have written. it captures that feelings of a parent who loves their child, and even if their life is riddled with mistakes, this child is perfection. wonderful job. thank you for entering, and best of luck <33
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awesome
ive never known my own father and ive always wanted to be one my entire life. my little brother was born when i was eleven and as he grew it was because of him that i stayed out of so much trouble. this was an excellent piece that reminds me to not do what i want to do and build up my own fortress of hate and sadness but to open up and share with the children so they can grow up to be better than us. well done -
A very beautiful testament you have made here with this write.
Children definately are a gift from God.
Thank you for sharing,
Take every care,
Sammy
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