It was a passing fling, she knew as she swallowed him, but she would always trade a meal tomorrow for a taste of today.
Author notes
I wrote a variation of this some years ago for a "pop fiction" publication, but then I lost my internet connection and as far as I know, it was never actually published.
Written September 17th, 2004
A contest entry
- Friday Night Quickie w/Desiree Darkk & Cvillelisa by cvillelisa.
300 points, ended September 18, 2004, 7 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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amazing how 50 words can COME down to nearly one sentence hehe if you know what i mean, hehe. thanks for entering.
peace,
lisa
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yes I agree with star the poem is a single line as in one sententce if you only whant one line on the screen figure out how many letters that is and put that as a max or clarify the rules I read them and I would have allowed this poem.
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And, appendix to previous comment... if this contest isn't a regular event, it should become one.
Maybe rotate the hosting seat so it's not always the same person spending points.
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Understood... I wondered about that but didn't feel the poem would be as effective if trimmed down even further (it started as a 50 word story)... just as a suggestion, though, you might want to clarify the rule if this contest is or becomes a regular occurence. The poem is a single "line of poetry" even if it's not a single "line" on the screen.
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Try as I may, even on the smallest view font, this is longer than one line so it must be disqualified. We set the rules for the contest and we have to follow them when judging. At least you didn't post a three stanza poem like one of the others did. Liked it though.
Desiree -
I wouldnt mind reading this its its entirety if such a thing exists.
I really like this snippet leaves me wanting more. -
yes, ah, you've a whole encompassing story, it seems, poetically, ahhhhh...in one line, 'a taste of today'...
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the perpetual craving
very "tasteful"
i enjoyed
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I like the spin on this ..very cool, perspective is everything in my mind ...and well, I love word play too ..so very cool.
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