Dear Dave,
This is really fucked up you know that?
How the fuck did you get me pregnant?
I thought you were wearing the condom,
'cause I know I was taking the pill.
Don't you dare come near me,
I don't want your burden,
I don't want anything to do with you.
I don't care if the babies mine,
I don't give a shit.
DONT YOU EVER,
come near me.
Don't you tell that boy about me,
don't you tell my son about me you hear?
Tell him I'm dead,
I don't care.
Don't EVER tell him about me,
I don't want to be in this crap.
I don't want to be stuck with the fucking mess.
If you do come near me,
I'll kill the son,
I'll sue you.
I SWEAR I'll do anything in my power,
to NOT have this fucking burden.
- the mother to your child-
I found this,
hidden in dads drawer.
Was this my mother?
The mother who died?
How could she hate me so much?
What happened?
Did I cry at night?
I've been reading this,
every year, always makes me cry and shiver.
How could a mom hate her child so much?
Why did she leave me?
Didn't she care the slightest?
Dad is off working,
I'm all alone at night.
We have a lot of money,
but he's never home for me.
I'm always alone,
I've always cried alone.
I never had anyone to hug me,
or tuck me in.
Before I read this note,
I believed my mother would've,
if she were alive.
She would have,
hugged me till my tears dried.
Now I slash my wrists,
knowing that I was never really loved,
I'm too much of a coward to kill myself.
Dear mother to my son,
I know you don't want to see me,
I know you don't want to hear from me,
I know all of this.
But I thought you might want to know,
that your son is dead.
-dave the grieving father-
Author notes
Sad and angry mixed?
Written September 17th, 2004
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Certainly is a mix of sadness and anger, but wonderfully put with a great flow to it. Awesome
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Kasey, I decided to come back to one of your older pieces first and this caught my eye. I have to say that this one blew me away. The powerful emotions that gripped my heart and wrenched it so tight were unbelievable. I noticed that Tim (aka Sharcu) congratulated you for a first gold. I can also see why this would win gold. All the hurt and pain a child feels when they feel unloved and unwanted kills me. Even though this was sand and angry it was an amazing piece of writing that I thank you for sharing with us. You showed some real depth here. Keep that ink flowing, this was spectacular. Love and God bless you my friend, Joyce
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WOW!!! This is probably the most frightening and sad poem I have ever read. If this is indeed real, well what can I say? How terrible. I truly applaud your skill and courage for posting this piece.
if it is fiction, well then... awesome write!
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Wow... I can see why you won the gold trophy... that was powerful. really powerful.... Congrats on this getting you your first gold, by the way. The... letter poem is filled with a lot of emotions that you very well described... and expressed throughout this piece of work. Wow... makes me want to cry. Great work, though.
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whoa...i just loved this poem. it just screams out awesomeness..great job. this poem was so sad though..a mother didnt even want her child, and when the child finds out she hated him he kills himself.... bravo!
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holy s hit! dude. alot of emotion. i loved it. awesome write
zach -
cool! wow such emotion love it!!!
pita bread
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this is a really good write, so emotional and sooo sad!!
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I am very proud of this, thank you for your comment.
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As promised, I am now reading yoour earlier work.
I must say that the stronges part in this (emotionally and in style of writing) is in the very end. I understand how you won in this contest. It had that perfect balance where the anger stays anger and not something less, and it had an edge to it. This is by far the best I've read of you yet.
FallenLeaves
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This is a beautifully sad poem. It strikes a painful chord in my heart. The thought that mothers can actually do that to their sons makes me want to cry. Usually I don't care for bad language in poetry, but the way you used it amplified the mother's hate for her son. Oh, I want to cry now. Great write.
~Tricia
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I'm sorry I made you cry! The reason the boy was cutting is because well he was in so much pain from his mother not loving him..that is the only thing he could think of doing. I'm glad you liked this though. I know cutting is not a thing to do, but when your dad is gone and you find out your mom doesn't love you, wouldn't you try to find somethign to do to yourself? I mean...when I wrote this, I wrote it like th boy thought it was all of his fault, and when peopel think it's their fault, then they will hur thimselves in some way. Do you know what I'm saying?
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killin me'
ummm, you have me uncontrollabe shaking, no offence to you, but when I clicked on this, I was expecting to comment because I know you want points and hate it when you lose them, but half way through you wrote about cutting, why? If you read my poem friends poem My Faithful Snake her name is Peaches87 you will see why I ask why, if not you just won't know, but other than that part, I liked this. It was irony and I could feel every character. Nice job. But still I am crying and shaking and vibrating, because I pushed myself to read this. And it was good in the end. And I have to applaud this cuz you were the first EVER person poem I read that delt with this kind of situation and it made me quiver, nicely done
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oh my gosh Kasey!! I don't get emotional often, but wow this made me really really really sad, I almost cried. I was touched. talk about deep emotion...awesome awesome job. good luck in the contest, this has to win something.
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I BOW DOWN TO YOUR PRAISE ON MIGHTY KAAAAAAATTTTIIIIEEEEE (that is your name KEEP IT! lol.) I'm glad you liked it! I mean.....III of all people can even feel the power and the pain and and the emotion!
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IN-FUCKING-CREDIBLE
omfg, THIS WAS FUCKING AWESOME.
i'm serious. that was such a powerful poem, i could feel all the emotion & stuff, IT WAS JUST GREAT!!!!!! ahhh !@#%$@#^#$5
that was so awesome, i dont even know what to say!! lol. i am speechless. it was just a really great poem.
once again, accept my praise! lol
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oh.holy.f*ck.oh.my.god. UNBELEIVEABLE!!! i loved it..this was just absolutely amazing. all the anger and the hate and the 'raowrw!!" haha..omg. this was so good. i loved it. i could FEEL the anger in this piece. so gooooood...i love how u had the 3 letters, one from each person progressing over the period of time. keep the passion.
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o my this has to be the sadest thing that i have ever read i like it great job!!
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10 T's
woh....the emotion and presentation gave me goosebumps....i can't say more than wow! i mean you're a sensational writer based on this poem...i'm going to read more of your stuff..! -
Whoa...this is really sad. I would cry if i had the energy....this makes me sad...i must go read a happy poem now...i don't understand why anyone wouldn't love their son, or see what they are going through...people don't pay attention to kids these days, when they should. They really should
Good write
XoXo
NiKKi -
WOW.. wow.. wow.. that's all I can say about this poem. At first when I started reading it I was thinking, well.. this person is gonna hear from me, because I dont think it's right to do that to their own child. I thought maybe it was something you wrote about your own. I'm sorry I thought that and I changed my mind as I went on to read further. If this is true, I'm sorry. I did make me cry at the end. This touched me deeply because the way that emotion flowed about someone's own child, when I can't even have my own. This deserves an applause and I really hope you win in the contest.
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I didnt care for the language. The write was good it got the message across. -robo-
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Wow--I love a poem with stuff I don't expect at the end. I love the emotion in this poem, plus the creativity...nothing that I think that I could have done, but I am so glad that you did. Thanks for the intense read!! :-)
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Oh my..uh..first I felt all the anger..and now..I just wanna ball my eyes out.. This had alot of emotion and power in it.
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Jesus fucking Christ on a stick.... that just blew me away. I mean really and truely. Like wind blowing a leaf off a tree (they're doing that now you know, lol) Anyways, this was incredible. You should definatly win something for this if you haven't already.
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Not exactly but well just the swearing and everything...
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Yes I do......but when I Was 11 I used to read all this stuff, and hear it too lol. So...I don't think it's all that bad right?
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ohhh..... i dont think i should be really like reading this, well done on the gold trophy but im only 11 so like well.... ya know what i mean
Rowena Jo
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Omg OMg OMG!!!!!! THANK YOU!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! yay! I love that you love this.....it was meant to bring tears to your eyes. Thank you so much thank you thank you thank you! *hugs*
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AWESOME!
Whoa!!!! This is EXTREAM!! I really love it. It shocked me. Its suprizing, Its sad. Good write! YOU HAVE ANAWESOME CHANCE IN MY CONTEST.. JUST SO YOU KNOW.. This is the first poem Ive ever read that brought tears to my eyes.
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