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heartbreakers

You think that just because I have a penis, I have no heart
you think that just because you have looks, I should worship you
you think you can treat me any way you please right from the start
and that I give you all I have for just one screw.

You are greedy and selfish and conceited as hell
and your silicone implants have smothered your heart
and your perfume disguises your alcoholic smell
and your makeup reveals that you are a cheap tart

so stick to your drunkards and dumb redneck hicks
and I'll stick to the fat girls with honest intentions
because I'm not impressed by your boob-shaking tricks
and your heartless use of men is beneath all mention.

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this is not about ALL women, but those who it is about will know who they are.
Written September 16th, 2004

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  • NeferMaatNetjer silver member
    February 8, 2006
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    I know this is not a description of all women, but women like this do exist. I have met my fair share.
    incidently, my wife is on the heavy side, but has a kind heart, NEVER drinks, and loves me dearly, and i would'nt trade her for anyone i've ever picked up in a bar. I guess i learned my lesson.

  • fluofontis
    February 8, 2006
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    wow, harsh, but on some levels very true. i feel like i have to disagree, as i am not described in either description of females in this, but the description of alcoholic fake bitches is very true, and i know not all men are only looking for a fuck or hate women... great write

  • wolfbane64
    November 17, 2004
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    A great anthem to those ugly guys like me. Good job!


  • Delphinidae
    September 29, 2004
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    ROFL I am sorry, but I cannot help but laugh until my poor tummy hurts! I am not sure you intended on making this piece humorous, but you certainly gave me a hearty chuckle. This poem was angsty, but also entertaing with its clever humour. is still chuckling at 'boob-shaking tricks'. You know, I actually laughed out loud.. good thing I am by my slef.


  • Almighty Aphrodite gold member
    September 27, 2004
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    lol. You know, I actually find this funny--because I am not one of these boob-shaking broads who thinks that the world revolves around her just because she may have good looks. Heh, so I am not the supermodel type or anything, but I definitely do not think that I would have the right to treat a guy any kind of way if I did. I have been screwed over by so many men, I am almost inclined to agree with their thought patterns--but I do realize that there are some good men left in the world (at least, I hope there are). Actually, the women you describe seem to make up the majority of those I go to school with, how tragic...

    Very funny. I am laughing.

    Many blessings,

    Raven Aurora

  • shionann
    September 24, 2004
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    Sounds like a few I know, and a couple I go to school with...very funny write..


  • Megan Dearest
    September 24, 2004
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    This is awesome. I know exactly the kinds of girls you are talking about. They give other girls a bad rap. Great write!

    Meg


  • PurpleSky
    September 24, 2004
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    Wow that is some harsh words but hey to those that deserve them good! You made me laugh a little with this


  • J Rhys Davies
    September 22, 2004
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    I am sitting here laughing at this. There are a lot of women that can definitely fit the description, but to save face, if that is possible, there are a lot that don’t. But you still cracked me up nonetheless.

    ~ John


  • candy177
    September 21, 2004
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    Well...I must be one with honest intentions...I've never set out to hurt a man - although it has happened after he has hurt me. Interesting take on women...I'm not sure I like it much (but that's just because I'm a woman)! Good luck in the contest... It's well written...I will say that much!


  • Tigger Lady
    September 21, 2004
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    wow lol i loved this poem it was funny


  • TheEnigmaOfLife
    September 18, 2004
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    Awwww Tahutihotep I knows you was not talking about me !
    Wow, you really got your anger fueled emotion across here! SIGH, sadly I must admit that this poem does hit the blonde on her bleached head and silicone boobs too that there are some of my kind who fit this bill all to well! An excellent emotive piece for the contest, best of luck to you!

    ~Nikki~


  • Naughtygrlred
    September 17, 2004
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    you know i believe the first stanza to be true, but i dont have silicone breats mine are real, and as far as make up goes all i wear is a tan shade of lipstick and liquid eye liner, and well i love all men wel most of them and ya i am greedy when it comes to my lovers but what i do is what i do and none ya to you, oh and i treat all men with the same attention, that is because i am a silva-nizer!


  • In-fin-ite
    September 16, 2004
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    I found this hilarious and I found that I actually agreed with most of it. The first stanza especially reminded me of things I have heard straight women say. The second stanza reminded me of things I have seen and or experienced for myself. The third was the most hilarious to me. I loved the play on the old say, "date somebody ugly they'll love you better."

    Over all it was a good write and the images and emotion were pure things. Good luck in the contest!

    ~JayLynn

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