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She was so beautiful…
So lucky to be herself…
She seemed so strong
No one ever knew.
Underneath it all was something dark and twisted
A hate buried deep within her gut…
It would poke and prod at her till she could take no more
And on one moonlight night
she took the pain away.

Forever the end.

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Written September 15th, 2004

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  • He Who Judges
    January 27, 2005
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    Superb

    I really like this one specifically. Leaves a good impression of emotions, and is worth reading over and over.. wonderfully written.


  • wash it all away
    October 9, 2004
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    wow this is good its well written and shows alot of emotion in it.
    well done
    ***july fairy***

  • Confused Gemini
    September 15, 2004
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    well whoever wrote this did an excellent job because this is all to true about sooo many people. With the exception of the first 2 lines, this poem is exactly how I am with the other exception that I haven't killed myself but not without attemps. This poem is truly great and thanks for posting it.

    Gem