Tremulous, indecisions irritates
the subconscious nucleus
of our inner- selves nibbling and gnawing;
As a rat, tossing aside fragments,
of half discovered memories of
a time long gone.
Pounding blasts of reason shake
the very foundations of rationalism,
into committing the unforgivable
sin of compromise; In disgust, we
adjust our thinking to a higher
plain; Moving, from our lethargy
into actions resulting from
the need to express ourselves,
in a manner befitting our titles,
of "A writer of words, a writer
of poems"................
Author notes
mmm.. well this came after I read the last few poem I wrote.
Written September 15th, 2004
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excellent
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I certainly will
I am glad you liked this poem, it is the heavier side of me 
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thank you mmm I get these mad urges
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Wow, that was pretty in depth there, i like it... very mysterious once again... im glad somone actually responds to what i say about their stuff... obviously your a good enough poet to know that all criticizm is good in one way or another... keep up the good work and ill keep on reveiwing your stuff... it seems like it can hold my attention pretty well, lol... i hope you read som of mine too and tell me what you think, great job again...
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Great
Wow, really interesting write, a bit different from your usual style but I really like it! Kind of a cool concept, and an really interesting description. Good job!
Purplerose
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Many thanks for the corrections I am always pleased to have help with punctuation as I am hopeless in this field
. I am glad you enjoyed it , thank you 
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Thank you I am so glad you enjoyed it, many thanks for the kind words
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Thank you I am so pleased you enjoyed it Many thanks for the kind review
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this was a fantastic release of energy! compressed and compounded into nuclear power poetry. great write! smile
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I like this very much, and your words ring true.
I think a comma or two less would be better in the places where they break the thought in two, and 'plain' should be 'plane', and I think that "indecision's irritate" should lose the apostrophe or be changed to "indecision irritates".
Pardon the corrections, but it's a peeve of mine most of the time (unless I do it...LOL).
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Wow, I love the way you put this together, cutiepie! The science of it, and then the wonderful imagery...it's just so fascinating. It totally explains the way I feel sometimes! Great write!
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Wow...a wonderful read. I espeically love the title "nuclear reaction"...and I love poetry like this, based off history or science...just using those terms, that language, and twisting it around, and using it to express something more poetic...something extremely human. Furthermore, some nice diction here...e.g. "lethargy" and "subconscious nucleus"...the latter being just a wonderful phrase. Highly creative and energetic. Just a burst of beauty in this poem. Well-crafted. Well done! ~EL d
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Sorrrrrrrrrrrry Have my professor head on Thanks for your kind words
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ok
that was deeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeep
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Lol Renee, I work better when Im mad with myself I get into the cutiepie type poems when I get lazy still it is always so nice to have your comments, I do appreciate them very much
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Thank you
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refreshing
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Don't be so harsh on yourself ( but I guess we all are our own worst critics) This piece is great , and I am sure the ones you are talking about are too, as i have as of yet read a bad poem of yours , so chin up and keep them coming ,
Reenie
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It must be my form of writers block When I get uptight, I am inclined to write nondescript poems till I get annoyed with myself and then I come out with something like this. Amazes me Many thanks for your kind words
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I like this, I think you showed an excellent use of vocabulary and I get the feeling you're less than happy with your recent work {?} Anyhow, I liked this a lot.
~Destiny~
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