orange ,ruffled leaves
raining piles of Autumn bags
at last amber blend
Author notes
Written September 15th, 2004
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A contest entry
- Autumn’s Wonder by astralshepherd.
345 points, ended September 22, 2004, 48 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Dust Off Those Old Haiku (Non-Traditional) by Pollycheck.
425 points, ended December 15, 2007, 14 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Autumn Haiku 5-7-5 by piccola.
600 points, ended September 29, 2008, 22 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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this is very creative you must have fixed this from the original version I count 17 nope I see it now it is in the second line other than that this is great.maybe if you put autumn bags raining piles. Just a thought
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Red, yellow ,orange ,ruffled leaves
Raining piles to rake
Trash bags fall apart, Autumn
Thank you for entering my ku contest. You have painted a very vivid picture with this write, but I count eighteen syllables vice the maximum allowed of seventeen. -
Beautiful! Good write.
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That was quick to respond to my poem. Thank you.Kendhal22
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kendhal22, thank you so much for your entry into my contest “Autumn’s Wonder” This comment is simply a ‘boiler plate’ remark I have made on each entry to let you know I appreciate the effort you made in creating this poem and entering this contest and that I have read your work. I have made preliminary notes on your poem and should you decide to make any revisions, (which is perfectly ok) please (IM) me and let me know so I can re-visit it and revise my notes accordingly. Again my thanks, blessings and best wishes ~richard
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