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Dying Confused

Crumpled words are in your hands,
To still remember them.
You say you won't give it back,
But this just makes no sense...
Just two months of romance
Yet you're deep in my skin,
The heart has dim emotions,
But there's a feeling still...

I had just lost my first lover,
Sky was twice the shade of gray.
Looked beside and saw you falling,
Had to stop, Death delayed.
Two lost souls holding hands,
One pulling out, one pulling in.
Each other easy to understand,
But you had the urge to resist...

My spirit asked to be free,
Yours feared a drastic change;
Soul torn apart over me,
Sanest choice:to push me away.
And what did you accomplish?
You're still not at ease;
Wanted to be true to yourself,
But you are divided still...

We took the anger and fears,
The longing stayed with me.
Wander with your heart made of steel,
No one knows that I still bleed.
If you want, remember it all;
I never knew what I meant to you.
You'll never know when I fall,
Thus you will keep the truth...

Author notes

Written when I still felt anguish for the failed romance with my ex best friend.
Written August 24th, 2004

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  • Lara
    September 15, 2004
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    Isn't it weird to come across old poetry, and feel as though you have moved on, or at least in that direction? A very heartfelt poem, this one...sometimes just because we love someone, doesn't mean we should be with them romantically...sometimes it's just too much.


  • causeless rebel
    September 15, 2004
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    i bet u do feel this caity......believe me i do too...and yes i do like this write...god, its like these words came straight from my own mind....excellent job


  • Clyde1023
    September 14, 2004
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    i feel this....i like how the lines flowed into eachother....great write!