My arms around his neck
His around my hip
cheek to cheek and then i guess
maybe, lip to lip
im in heaven
only thinking of my man
swaying back in forth
in snyc as a marching band
gliding across the floor
leaning on eachother....
he's talking softly in my ear
speaking in muffled tone...
saying those words
those words so few...
he holds me tighter
i make out an "i love you..."
we touch lips
and for an instant
all my worries
feel o so distant
it's one of those moments
definintly not meant for a kodak
"i miss that night", i cry
"i wish i could go back"
we'll be together
i promise, forever....
reliving that
slow dance.....
Author notes
This is a poem about a dance a few weeks ago i went to with my bf, aaron. it was just as i put it in the poem "magical"
if you were curious we did kiss, but then again, what else is knew, i guess it was special and i really shouldnt say that, lol, it makes me seem like a slut, o no....that was my fisrt kiss, yeah....sure...., lol, but no my first kiss was much more magical and i plan to write about it in one of my next poems!!! i bet you just can't wait, lol o yeah in for contest qualifications "jessie is a sexy beotch"
Written September 14th, 2004
A contest entry
- anything... by MmmCoffee.
300 points, ended October 11, 2004, 16 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Awsome
This is really a romantic poem I really did like it I almost can see this happening it had a great visual.. And the flow was really great.. I have enjoyed reading your poems.. Keep up the Great work!!!
Always,
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hmmm, I've never danced with any man other than my Dad and uncles and they hardly count. This poem was soooo romantic! I just finished a book about a mystery romance and a betrail in Rome so this went along nicely with the mood I'm in. Keep up the good work!
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this is really good
its very romantic and sweet
it has a great rhyme an rythm and it flows well throughout.
its very riminiscant of my HS years
sighs
this is nive you wirte very well
and i love these backgroudns youve chosen, but especially the one for your authors page
there is something about that one ive alwyas liked
its so innoncet
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omg, thank you!!! i am so excited, that's my first trophy ever!!!! wow!!! yay!!!
lol, thank you so much!!!
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haha, you noe what i just realized, you said to put jessie is a sexy beotch, lol, my name is jessica, my friends call my jessie, including my little bro, that hilarious, i could just see them saying that
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thank you! i am so happy! lol, this is the first time that someone judging any of my poems has actually considered taking it to finals, i feel so privliged....ya im weird...
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I really liked this! If you close your eyes after you read it, you can imagine it perfectly...of course, I imagine it as me and the guy of my choice, but its still good!
Great job!
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great job keep it up
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very good...
try looking at it from a guys point of view, its cool that way too.. (well from mine it is)
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Wow, that brings alot of emotions to me. It reminds me of so many guyz that I have a crush on. It is really good, I loved it! good luck in the contest
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awesome
oh my gosh!! that was so good. i think that, that was the best written by you. i may be wrong, but thats my opinion. the imagery was good. i could "see" everything you and aaron were doing. ur lucky to have a guy like him. he seems really nice. ttyl. -
lol, funny, ok, hey i didnt noe i was a preferred member? that weird, im not paying for nothin
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your right, i do hate you more now! you suck!!!! this was a great poem based on a "magical" experience! i want a guy to love me like that cries life is soo unfair. glares great write none the less! keep it up! i plan on reading a lot more from you!
~meg~
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