I don't understand you
nor do you me
join me here in harmony
outcasts from society
together you and me
my one true love
that you are
yet you seem so far,
away from me all alone
please hold me close
don't ever let me go
by my side you will know
we were meant to be
i'm in the dark
without you here
don't ever leave, i need you near
losing you, my one true fear
i don't want solitude
together forever we will be
ensured by immortality
together we'll both be free
together you and me
Author notes
hey i wrote this poem about a guy i like, and i know it gets sort of repetitive but i meant it to be that way....so i hope you like it. 
Written September 14th, 2004
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no, i appreciate the criticizm i know i'm not a good writer. i was pissed that day, sorry. i dunno i know i can probably improve my writing at least a little bit, but i guess i'm too lazy. well thanks for your comment.
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would you rather I had lied and said "omg this is so gr8 u r such a gr8 riter?" or something like that? It has potential; it just needs some work.
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wow thanks a lot. whatever
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it's sweet, but the imagery used is really jaded and overdone.
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lol shut up natalie..............C-A-N-D-Y!!!!!!!!!!!
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FUCK YOU!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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this is gay jk i already read your poems
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alright then keep writing ~Rush
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aw, this is sweet, I really liked it. You are a great writer, keep up the wonderful work.
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I love it, it can be put in either a friendship aspect or love of another. Atleast that's what I feel, it's something that you read when you just broke up with someone or they broke up with you. Very touching.
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Wow, I loved the rhythm you had in this write, but the poem itself was excellent. Very well done. Love the name BTW !
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ya i should shouldn't i
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o lala..jk.thats sweet and ui likeit alot all my poems about guys r heartbroken ones i liks this much better.good jobon it.
~rae rae~
P.S. u shoudl get aim or msn messenger -
Hey girl..yeah I know who this is and your poems are equal to mine. Great write...Sorry I won't be able to leave you a lot of messages..I don't have a lot of time on here.....bye...Laura
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aww nices thats sweet
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wow...its amazing!! and part about immortality and that stuff... this just rocks! i cant help thinking how it would be great lyrics for a song...
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wonderful
it is a great reminder of all the great things you feel when you are in love with someone who doesnt love you the same... you are doing a great job in this poem even if it is repetitive.. keep them coming
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