Hook
Bitterness curled his hair and turned it black
Enveloped in a lonesome burning rage
Zealously he fights to kill his youth
Obsessed with flying taunts that haunt his rest
Aboard his galleon pirate ship he schemes
Relentless plans to ruin his lighter half
Pan
Absorbed in endless play and make-believe
Begrudging any hint of love or care
Serene he plays in trees and cotton clouds
Inventing games with boys who have no home
No memories can haunt his innocence
The thought of growing up is but a myth
He toys with shadows and with pirate ships
Endlessly anguishing his darker half
Wendy
Just when she learned about her hidden kiss
Entangled in a nest of doubt and dread
Never-land became her place to learn
None other than the truth she held within
A way to hold forever dear her youth
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Written September 14th, 2004
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I love Peter Pan and the gang...and this poem really seemed like a good tribute to them. Delving into them as people...how Hook is an ass; how Peter Pan doesn't want to grow up; and how Wendy...is just Wendy. I also like the fact that this is an acrostic. Well done. I enjoyed it.
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i'm glad you enjoyed. it was written for a woman who would later become my wife. she was really into peter pan at the time.
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i love this poem it is excellent and especially how you connected it with my favourite movie. It makes fantasy for me and its really good.
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I always loved Neverland, and you captured it so well here. I really like the way you tied the AP author's names into the stories for Hook, Pan, and Wendy...that was cute. Wishing you all the best,
~*~Nicole~*~ -
I never was the Peter Pan loving gal, lol. I was more of a Lion King and Pocahontas (I think I watched this for a week straight when my dad brought it home when I was little). I like Brodie's comment. I have seen Peter Pan, but I never thought of Hook as trying to kill his Youth.. Thanks for sharing.
>Kami< -
I like this very much. Great job!
~sheri -
Oh this is so neat. I've always liked the Peter Pan fairy tale the best. I had never thought of Peter Pan and Hook possibly being one in the same, two sides of one person battling aganist each other. Neither willing to accept the age and livelihood of the other. I may be wrong, because I usually am when interpreting poems but fantastic job just the same. I enjoyed this very much.
Elizabeth
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I would love to have the hidden script out in the open. Would you care to share that? I am sure we will have so much to speak about.
Take care,
Myra
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great take on a great story ... i think Robin would also agree
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hidden kiss & meanings
definately a layered context poem to think about, liked the way you contrast the two as lighter and darker halfs of growing up and adolecence in the middle as wendy
wonderfully imagery from start to finish to describe hook & pan's personalities pointed out so bluntly, of black hair curled by bitterness and trying to kill his youth, while peter is so serene at play & untroubled by memories, wow
one thought would be to expand on the hidden kiss of wendy and her dilema being caught between the two forces of good and evil, thanks for another crazy good view of peter pan and growing up
keep writing that good stuff, i suppose i'll have to wander through your stuff more often if i can
gooday
phil -
Excellent poem, I liked the way that you tied other writer's names into the story- as though you were portraying them as characters from Peter Pan? Although, I may be wrong because nobody else mentioned this. I love your character description, it was rather clever
Thanks for commenting on my poem, I like to hear other opinions, and keep writing
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interesting perspective
a synopsis of all the main characters in the story of Peter pan.
Makes one think about it abit!
Keep penning on one stroke at a time!
Bill -
You told the story of Peter Pan very well and in less time then the original writer. LOL I like the way you expressed the characters personalities. Never thought I would be reading this when I read the title. But hey you did a great job anyway!
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I must agree with Mariza on this acrostic. I like the Wendy part the best. She sorta ties the other two together. Excellent write.
~Bezoar -
Good Piece.
A free verse from you? Well that is interesting. But besides that, this is an intriguing piece; I liked the way you took the different characters from that very famous childhood tale, and gave described them, giving them a sort of personality other than the one we are most familiar with. The ending wasquite good, as well, if I may say so. Overall, this is a good piece and I am gld you wrote it. -
That was cute. An insightful little look into the world of Neverland.
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i really liked this piece, i love the way that it was all done!!!great job on such a great poem oh and i really liked the part about peter pan!!! that was my fav one!! keep it up
later days -
Hm I don't understand what this piece is refering to, but I liked the writing. Superior quality as always.
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Great piece, you told the story of Peter Pan very well. I like the way you expressed Hooks personality. he was always my favourite, I guess coz maybe he is evil lol. I loved this write.
keep it coming
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This is splendid. I love how you melded the characters together,adult- anguish ...preteen- innocence and adolecence- knowledge and curiosity. My favorite character is also Wendy becuase she seems to capture Pan. Awesome write,
~dani~ -
Excellent my friend! Have I said that before?
My favorite part is Wendy. I always liked Wendy, she is the bridge between Pan's reality and dream, at least that is how I see her.
Again, an excellent poem!
K&L
Mari
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Fantastic
Excellent. I love it so much. I still think you should replace galleon pirate ship with The Jolly Roger, but I understand what its like to become attatched to your own words.
I love the way you bring everything together. Bring the person split in three back into one within an obsession. It's working. I didn't think anyone would be able to do such a thing. I must applaud your effort and caring.
Absinthe
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This is very good. It is an excellent psychoanalytical potrayal of characters in a fantasy world that almost makes them seem realistic.
I did not expect such when I read the title. Honestly, I do not think the title accurately portrays the content, but it does set the reader in the right mood for being so acutely made to head-nod as this is read. It's like a slap-in-the-face that removes all traces of merriment from the story, and brings to light the reason behind such a story being told.
Well written, and well done.
I applaud.
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