A young girl sits in her room
Laying her head back
She whispers
I didn't think this would happen to me
I was in love and I thought it was meant to be
She places her hand upon her stomach
Feeling like she could burst
Tears keep coming
They won't stop
Her boyfriend calls
He hasn't heard the news
Then she tells him what he doesn't want to hear
He gets angry and hangs up the phone
Crying he leaves her all alone
He didn't want this
It wasn't planned
So he left his baby's mother
Abandoning his child seemed right to him
As months pass by her belly gets rounder
She tries to hide it beneath her sweater
Maybe she's just gaining weight
She hopes that's what they think
A world of opportunities have just closed for her
Eventually her family and friends find out
They leave her there with nothing
At the drop of a dime
Now she's on the streets
Cold and wet
She's starving and her baby is too
Now she has nothing left to do
She delivers the baby
Alone in a hospital room
Not one person showed to see the great news
Her baby is perfectly healthy
But that doesn't matter
She has no money to support this child
The baby will grow up poor and neglected
Not even a father to pay attention to it
It will grow up cold and full of hatred
But love for his mother cause he knew she could make it
Author notes
Option 6
Written September 13th, 2004
A contest entry
- 36 Options Contest! by chasingwhiterabbits.
700 points, ended September 3, 2008, 20 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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I love the last line of this poem. It's such good closure to this story. Good luck in the contest.
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Thanks so much mark I appreciate the comment, i'm really glad you liked it.
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Shari this is a great story! You put a lot of emotion into it, which I absolutely love
your last line brought hope and I like that! I couldn't find anything wrong with it at all..Wonderful work!!
$Mark$
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thanks luke, love ya.
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what up, haven't heard from you in a while. I'm glad you liked this though, yeah it is def. different. I'm trying to touch base with everything you know, I just always seem to have a dark aspect on things though.
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Wow - heartbreaking - My friend did the same thing to his gf, so I punched him this really is a sweet poem. I really like it. well done,
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very diffrent stuff then i read on your site thingy, but very good. has a message and eventhough really didn't have rhyme it still reads well (i think so)
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i'm sorry my friend came over and i clicked out of it before I commented, i'll comment if you want me to still... thanks for the comment i guess..
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yeah it def. does happen too much. thanks you for reading my poem.
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thank you so much!
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A Very Heartfelt Poem
Wow this is such a beautiful heartfelt poem of a life of a young mother all alone. It is so tragic and happens much too often. Thank you so much for sharing. WONDERFUL POEM!!!!!! Take care Sandy
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What an emotional write...but this is also quite hopeful as well...I kinda left with the feeling that things were going to be alright in the end. You did a really nice job with this, and I admire your talent
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Thank you, I'm really glad you could feel emotion for this. I will be sure to stop by and read some of your stuff.
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Yep I think you put it in the right category it is extremely sad. I hope this isn't personal, and that you are happy and doing well. This was put together with alot of emotion, and it makes the reader feel the hurt of rejection and hopelessness.
You did a great job. ~Jess
p.s. come by and read my work sometime. I would love to see
what you think!
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