It’s killing me to hold on to these feelings like this
I felt this way since we had our first kiss
You were the first person to accept as I am
With all my imperfections, no one else can
Make me feel as good as you have
You have that magic touch; you’re such a good man
You’re a good listener, always willing to lend an ear
When I need to talk your always there
Whenever I needed a shoulder I had yours to lean on
I can barely function now that you’re gone
Thoughts of you cloud my brain
Thoughts of you bring me so much pain
Each time I speak to you I have an internal debate
Should I tell you how I feel, is it too late?
We’ve been bonded through a higher power
There will be a day, a minute an hour
Where your thoughts will meet mines
And these words will meet your eyes
The truth will be out; you’ll be able to see
The struggle that goes on within me
Every time I hear your voice
Every time I look in to your eyes
Every time I feel your touch
I want to tell you just how much
I’m in love with you and the things you do
The way you always set the perfect mood
The way your smile lights up a room
They way your touch ignites a fire within
How good it feels to be pressed up against your skin
It’s killing me!
To hold onto to these feelings like this
I felt this way since we had our first kiss
Author notes
Written July 26th, 2004
In a list
A contest entry
- What becomes of the broken hearted? by SublunaryRoses.
300 points, ended September 30, 2004, 35 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Such beautiful sensations & emotions overcome me when I read this piece. You captured this with such intricate detail!
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This is nice.. seemed a little wordy at first but it flowed well with the rhyming patterns.. It definately is full of emotions.. and what's better than a first kiss! other than feeling left on the side line when the feelings aren't returned.. yet you don't know how to say it! This was great and I'm happy to have read it. I kinda reflected back on mine for a bit.. and I felt the same way. You can't ever try to say that you don't know how to tell someone how you feel.. cus u just masterfully did here... maybe on paper but u did.. TELL HIM!!
and definately keep on writing more like this. It's great!
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::cries:: Oh, I've felt this way so many times before. I hate getting over someone that I can't get out of my mind. It hurts, especially when she never felt the same way about you. But anyway, I digress. I like the simplistic rhyming. This is a good one. Keep it up.
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Wonderful, Wonderful
Dee, this poem is so great, you've captured what so many of us feel in matters of the heart. Stop having that internal debate and tell that man how you really feel before it's too late. Someday your paths will cross again, so prepare yourself come what may. An awesome write Dee, your talent never ceases to amaze me.
Avril
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Aww, love can be a powerful, painful thing cant it. THis is a beautiful piece. Its never to late to try to come thogether with the one you love. I really like the way you mixed rhyme and free verse. I think this is a poem that most people can relate with, thats where its power comes from. The way that we have those people who we love and havnt told them. I guess it could be a fear of rejection or maybe thats just what it was for me. The love we could have had. Always say what you're thinking. Its always better to tell the one you love what you think, because if you dont you may miss out on the love of your life. Very Powerful poem. Beautifully done.
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this is so deep and well written such a great expression of your feelings and what you hold deep inside. remembering that first kiss is so romantic. even though there have been a lot of first kisses in my life there has always only been one that truly set my heart aflame. go with your heart my dear. Chuck
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Your poetry is awesome. You capture what so many people feel and go through. Excellent Huntress
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As the person two critiques ahead of me said, I have been reading a lot of poems lately where I have been able to see some slant to myself. This would be added to that quickly growing collection. I probably would've been able to relate to this even better had I been with my former fiance--the person I consider my one true love--but some of the feelings I had for him still linger to this day. It is very easy for me to attach to people, but hard to open my heart to them. Everything you describe reminds me of the time when I was able to...a very happy, lighthearted time in my life which I desperately long for.
Very sweet, and truthfully writen.
P.S.: cool screen name by the way, very creative!
Many blessings,
Raven Aurora
Edited on Oct 06, 11:41 because 'a typo! yuck!
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OMG, it's always so weird to read someone else's poem and totally see yourself when you read it. This exact thing has been happening to me lately....sigh ANYWAY, lol, Great poem you did really good with ryhming I like it alot
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