Solitary Soul...
whirle in smooth and calm ocean inside me..
because of you..
distance destroyed and words have life..
because of you..
I feel the intensity of effection..
because of you..
Great source of love encircle ..
because of you..
I hear your wishpers..in my sleepless nights..
because of you..
my solitary soul wana speak to you..
because of you..
yes promise will comes true..
because of you..
My thought ride on prayer..
because of you..
reaches to Lord..
because of you..
Author notes
personal feelings.....
Written September 13th, 2004
A contest entry
- Dream It! by blueyeddaisy44.
425 points, ended September 20, 2004, 25 entries
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sounds like you're in love, but i'm not 100% sure if this is what the poem's about.
it's always fun to experiment with refrains and other forms of repetition. here you have a parrallelistic epistrophe.
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Oh Knight I really like this piece, sorry I didnt get to read it sooner
You really do have a wonderful talent for writing
Take care
Elaine
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:)
I really enjoyed your poem, very nicely written.
Alvina -
Thanks so much for feeling the what i said...
Knight
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This is stunning Knight and it flows so beautifully aswell. There is an air of lonliness that really comes through in this which is quite somber in parts. The tone is very deep and acurately depics the feeling of isolation and perhaps a love that has been lost or is too far away to physically embrace. The repetition of the line "because of you" is poignant in driving home the overall tone and effect of this piece. Very intense and powerful with a significant and distinctive aura to it. A beautiful poem Knight, well done.
~Samantha
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