Black hat – Brown eyes
He struts across the room…
And the heart wants.
Broad shoulders – Lean hips
The fire he stokes consumes…
And the heart wants.
Dark hair – Full lips
His gaze, pins me to the wall…
And the heart wants
Tight Jeans – Cowboy boots
I’m helpless when he calls…
Cause my heart wants
Patricia Gibson-Williams
Author notes
This was written about the first time I saw my Joe. I still remember it vividly even over 3 years later. Since I didn't know him at the time I could only describe him from my point of view. Well actually I've seen the way a lot of women look at him and he inspires a sort of hunger in them. Lucky me he won't let them taste. ~ Patti ~
a) Should bras be required in the workplace? Yes – unless it’s a strip club
Is chest hair attractive? Yes - if there is not too much of it.
c) Do you like cold pizza or hot pizza? Hot – Hot - Hot
d) The pot of gold at the end of the rainbow didn't have gold, it only had pot roast with potatoes, baby carrots, onions and celery… oh and of course a little salt and pepper.
Written September 13th, 2004
In a list
A contest entry
- A Picture Is Worth A Thousand Words by Libellulidae.
500 points, ended September 18, 2004, 16 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Short and sweet. I thought that you did a nice job of talking about wanting needs? lol... can't think today. Anyways, keep it up!
Crissy -
Hi Angel
Not sure I have read you before but am glad I stopped by. Some men just have that charisma , a magnetism that makes women ( or members of their own species ! ) weak at the knees - and you convey this well , that X factor. Enjoyed this.
~ Sonia ~ X -
Short and to the point. Good luck in the contest.
Prince -
Thank you for the comment. When I was trying to keep from loving Joe, I kept telling my mind that he was dangerous and I'd get hurt if I fell for him... Others who knew he'd been married many times told me the same things, but I kept telling them I know what my mind says; but the heart wants what the heart wants. There is no reasoning with it sometimes. My heart wanted him from the moment it saw him. Lucky for me his heart wanted back.
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This was really good. It had an interesting format that worked really well for the content. For some reason the line where you said " the heart wants" just really stuck out to me. It was just a really good line to me . Anyway, awesome job. Thanks for sharing.
Dream BIG,
Elisabeth -
That was a good write. Short, but sweet. I really enjoyed that. It expressed emotion and descirbed in just a few, short lines. Great job!
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This is a really nice write...I liked that the lines were quite clipped because it gave the impression of snapshots and as creating a visual was the object of the poem, it worked beautifully. I also liked that you kept the imagery fairly simple: 'black hat, brown eyes', 'broad shoulders, lean hips' - not only did it maintain the picture without overloading the reader with pictorial information, it also implied that you were more interested in the person concerned than their physical appearance. lovely!
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wow, I love it. I would never have thought to write about first encounters before- that is a great idea. Maybe I will try it.
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Great description. I felt like I was there. Good job! XD
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jaw drops .... my heart wants and I've never even seen him! Splendid job!
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great
i like it. I got that butterfly feeling iin the pit of my stomach like when u see the guy of ur dreams. lol. well done!!
::bows::
Scarlet
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