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Autumn Leaves

Down the lightly littered path,

on lacy leaves I trod,

thru sunshine dappled pools of shade;

I’m nearer here to God.


Amber drifts across the green,

rose across the gold,

red mingles in the dance with glee,

as umber breaks the branches hold.


It is a woodland fantasy,

my heaven here on earth;

as autumns joyous dying breath,

gives way to winters birth.



Patricia Gibson-Little

Author notes

This was written while I was waiting for my Fiance to get out of surgery and inspired by a painting in The Woodlands – Herman Memorial Hospital, surgical waiting room.  Artist’s name was illegible, and the best I could make out was possibly Yhossid.
Written May 8th, 2003

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  • astralshepherd gold member
    September 13, 2004
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    AngelSeeker, thank you so much for your entry into my contest “Autumn’s Wonder” This comment is simply a ‘boiler plate’ remark I have made on each entry to let you know I appreciate the effort you made in creating this poem and entering this contest and that I have read your work. I have made preliminary notes on your poem and should you decide to make any revisions, (which is perfectly ok) please (IM) me and let me know so I can re-visit it and revise my notes accordingly. Again my thanks, blessings and best wishes ~richard


  • AngelSeeker silver member
    September 12, 2004
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    Thank you for your comment. I'm not sure that I have a way to change it or exactly what you found clunky about it. I guess I see the picture so vividly with the brownish (umber) leaf finally breaking free of the branch that held it. I will think about changing it if I get any other comments about that line. But without an idea of what was bothering the reader, I'm not sure that any attempt would be an improvement. ~Patti~


  • AngelSeeker silver member
    September 12, 2004
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    Joe is my husband now, we got married in May. We had to postpone our honeymoon due to more medical problems, but except for a hip that needs to be replaced he is doing well.
    Right now we are looking for a pain management specialest to help him deal with the pain; he can't have the surgery for at least six months becasue he has an infection in the bone and disk in his spine after surgery for a herniated disk. We are hoping to take a 2 or 3 day honeymoon very soon. It's not the 2 week one we had planned, but we spent most of that money on medical bills; but we have love to spare and that's what is most important. ~ Patti ~


  • artis
    September 12, 2004
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    bits of summer splendour now cast in a mosiac of multi colored memories, each carrying the scent of a love or a summer laugh that has long since faded with the warm breezes of August, die she must......lovely indeed is your poem,.....like a prized leaf dappled with red and gold, and sailing across the screen here to the world.....Artis
    Edited on Sep 12, 9:59 p.m. because ''.


  • onerios13
    September 12, 2004
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    Oh this was utterly lovely...I LOVE fall, it's the best time of year, all those yummy colors and cool breezes, and this piece gave me that first faint sniff of the season that I enjoy most! lol The flow was soothing and the imagery divine. Very very nicely done. Great job!


  • Dutch Doll
    September 12, 2004
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    Wow. Beautifully spoken (and written ) Touching. I am speechless (and awful with critiques) This was well done. Hope your fiance is done alright.

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