Sit back in the shade
Sipping sparkling gourmet water
Bubbling with the problems
Plaguing our world
Pretend not to notice
Refuse to care
THEY say its perfect,
The water’s greatest flavor
It must be the truth
A connoisseur’s delight
Gulp down the sparkling gourmet water
Feeding off the problems
Replacing plain, normal water
As the liquid of our lives
Thriving on corruption
Wonderful nutrient
From the flowing, sparkling spring
Of controversy and conflict
We obtain our nutrition
And continue existing
True values ferment
Author notes
I'm satiring the state of modern people and their mindset. They're willing to accept anything, and the ideals are poured down their throats.
Written September 11th, 2004
A contest entry
- Satire by godoffood.
700 points, ended September 14, 2004, 6 entries
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wow. I didn't fully get it but then I read your Author's comments. Wow. Genious! Very good, it got me giggling in how ridiculous it was and then your comment made me think. You have great insight into life. Keep exploring.
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This seems inspired by penn and teller's bullshit episode on bottled water, lol..
I could be off, but if it is- you get major brownie points, lol
Other than that- I liked it, the author comments add a certain something to the way its perceived..Good job -
Powerful, descriptive piece! It actually speaks volumes on society throughout. I love the water comparison as well. I wouldn't change a word of this piece to be honest. It's flow and meaning is quite captivating to the reader. Well done! Best of luck in the contest as well. I loved this
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