Billowing towers of black death
The cruel terrorist's breath
Breathing down the neck of America
As we watch in horror,the deadly extravaganza
Raining down concrete,and desperate men
Fleeing from death,in the tower they're in
Onlookers cry; onlookers shout
Wondering what these attacks are about
But there is no reason for this violent act
Only pure hatred, making their contact
It doesn't make sense,it doesn't seem real
The whole violent scene seems more than surreal
Driving to work to see such a sight
Seeing the planes on their final flights
Just two minutes late,saved by grace
Someone else will die in their place
The towers are crumbling as are the spirits
Of the American dreamer who won't stand to hear it
As the sirens are moaning their beckoning calls
To save lives from the fallen tower walls
But while we have suffered such a tremendous loss
The selfish aren't giving this second thoughts
They're pointing their fingers,blaming someone
For the hatred that has long since begun
Won't you think for a moment before you debate
About the lives that were lost,the workers who were late
About one of the worst attacks in our history
About the September 11th tradgedy
Author notes
Dedicated to all the lives that were lost in the towers, and to the brave passengers on the doomed planes.
Written September 10th, 2004
A contest entry
- September 11th by Feline2001.
400 points, ended September 14, 2004, 33 entries
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Alsome!!!!
Wow this is such a wonderful write you have created here i didn't think the end was weak at all so much emotion in this write and i love it we all should write poems in tribute to thoes who died on sep 11th. It was a day that all americans will be forever in are hearts. I love this poem though.
I love this line.
"The towers are crumbling as are the spirits
Of the American dreamer who won't stand to hear it
As the sirens are moaning their beckoning calls
To save lives from the fallen tower walls"
God Bless
Mary
Edited on Sep 12, 3:52 p.m. because ''. -
*faint* I hate you
omg, this was awesome, (although the end was a bit weak) but other than that, I AM SO PROMOTING THIS ONE! super duper pookie! -
Thank you thank you *bows* lol
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Oh wow... heh You put something horrific into such beautiful words... it put me at peace with it somehow...
thanks
~Amy
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Thanks and ure welcome
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I think we all as Americans should remember this day. Remember the loss of all of our fellow countrymen. I applaud your effort with this write.
Thanks for reading my work. I do appreciate it.
Regards,
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Thanks
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I know what you mean, thats so annoying. this one guy on a radio interveiw said nine eleven wasn't "bad enough" to constitute a "war on terror" I was so mad...anyways, thanks alot
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There are some people I know who are saying 'It didn't happen in my country. Why should I care?' and 'Thousands of people die everyday from disease. Those people would have died eventually anyways.' 'More people die of starvation. 9-11 was nothing compared to the numbers of those who starve to death.' and so on. It sickens me that that people would say those things. Congrats on a brave write. I appreciate it.
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A very excellent write. I enjoyed reading this very much. There should be more poems like this, especially with 9-11 being tomorrow. Excellent write. Thank you for sahring this.
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Hmm well srry you didn't like it *shrugs* I did my best...felt like I should write SOMETHING about nine eleven saying as tomorrow is the date...lol
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Eh, it wasn't the greatest write, but I suppose I can't bash this too bad without being dubbed a terrorist, huh? ha, just kidding.
Uh, I will say though with as much patriotic courage as I can muster up: I didn't like it. I appreciate that you tried, but near the end it seemed like you were struggling for interesting lines to tie it all together.
Good try though, I agree with imnopoet... it take3s guts to write about 9/11. Definitely. -
Somehow, I think you'll get a lot of applause on this poem. Just a hunch.
But it takes bravery to write a poem about 9/11. Since the event was so dreadful, a poem has to really be stirring for it to be good. And you pulled it off. Great job. -
I hated this day this day was so depressing i hate even thinking about it because of everything that went on in my own life after that tragedy i really hate that ppl have to be this rude to take out half of our country or wat ever it was over all of this i hate the fact that ppl can be this cruel it is so sad that we have to go outside in fear now adays just to play because of the fact that there is so many ppl in this world who would hurt us its not supposed to be where we fear our kids to go out and play god didnt attend for his world to be like this but no it has to be this way because our soicety is so crazy now adays anyways god bless u and this great write i really enjoyed this peice. good write sad, and i will be reading more. ttyl
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Thanks and I'm sorry
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wow.....awesome poem i had family in that tragedy
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