~ Defeated By Love ~
A heart that once kept perfect time with another’s
now slowly beats to a rhythm of it's own
arms that once reached out and held someone
swing freely at my side unhindered by any contact
Eyes that once gazed so freely upon a face
now look to the sky hoping to find solace
and a voice that once whispered anothers name
now stays quiet, it's sound drowned by my sighs
Dreams that once seemed so real and so powerful
have now shattered into tiny confetti like pieces
as the wind blows them further from my reach
and i am helpless to do anything other than watch them disperse
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Author notes
Sometimes what we want can't be and we are helpless to do anything about it.... and sometimes we just run out of inner strength to fight for what we want...
Written September 10th, 2004
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Wonderfully Put
I know this lonliness, and you have put it into words perfectly. The heart that used to beat with your's, the someone you reached out for, the face you looked upon, the name you whispered, must know that they have lost someone wonderful and special..... You will find someone more worthy of your affections
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For some reason, the title just jumped out at me. I so know this well expressed passion of "no longer". The heart breaks,
the soul yearns and the life feels incomplete. Here's hoping healing has come. -
Ahh the heartbreak and sorrow of lost love. I can hear the lonely echo of a breaking heart drift through the heartless silent valley of tears.
A poignant and beautiful disply of a woman with a broken heart.
May the sun of romance once agan soon shine its radiant light upon you.
Hugs
Dennis
PS This has happened to me as well. Here are the links of how I expressed it.
allpoetry.com/Poem/757180
allpoetry.com/poem/457917
allpoetry.com/poem/431212
You are not alone LadyStarlight. -
OUCH!! been there - am again, actually, but not breaking my heart this time! An emotional and evocatibve read, well-written. (coupla typos - its shouldn't have an apostrophe and confetti-like should have a hyphen) I've been away from here for too long - not enough time for everything I need to do, but will try to read more of you soon,
if this is acutely personal and current, hold on in there my dear, one day you'll just idly scratch these feelings, and not raise blood...
love,
Sheona -
Am I doomed to find constant reminders of my loneliness? I will say, first of all, that I wholly agree with your author's comments. Love seems to be the dream that will always be ephemeral in reality for me, and that's if it ever manages to materialize at all. And I've long since exhausted all of my reservoirs of strength; I've laid my sword down in this fight, and decided that love is no longer worth pursuing.
This piece is absolutely stunning! I am always awed by your flawless style, whether it rhymes or not. This piece, so beautiful in its expression, belies the pain that many of us have felt (or will feel sometime in our lives). I can relate to this as well... I have been stabbed in the back so many times, and have watched my dreams dissipate before my eyes, that there just is no more hope left.
Many blessings,
Raven Aurora
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Stunning
Dreams that once seemed so real and so powerful
have now shattered into tiny confetti like pieces
as the wind blows them further from my reach
and i am helpless to do anything other than watch them disperse
It's great to see you writing again
The last stanza completely pulled me into your words, you have a sutle way and I can't help but admire the mind that creates such poetry, it's always similar to my way of thinking only better, lol..And again thanks so much for commenting on my poetry ( means a lot)...
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well, doll, when it comes to weakness and defeat, you have it nailed. I like the way it is presented too, action betraying emotion, like I was watching it happen instead of reading it. Funny thing, love, isn't it? Make or break....sigh. Good piece, starry.
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great
awsome write. i really enjoyed this piece.keep up the good work. -
Love is like a butterfly, if you hold it too tight you crush it and if you hold it too loosely it flies away. Yea, I know that's not an original quote, but that's what your poem reminded me of. I really liked it and I can totally relate. I also liked your author comment. I summed up your poem very nicely. Good job.
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life gives us what we can handle and in time miht reward us with what we wanted in the first place. well written
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*sniff*
I agree with above comment about the slipping out of one's fingers. that perfectly sums up the way the poem made me feel. I love it in a very depressed way.
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within this i feel the pain and helplessnes as one who is loved slips out of one's fingers...like sand or snow...the harder you grasp...the more it goes!
I did enjoy this!
Keep penning on one stroke at a time!
Bill -
Good
Great write I liked it alot.
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