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Dance with your senses
 Like a dancer of flamenco
 Bold and rouged and slender
 Flashing eyes of fire
 Witness the desire
 To dance, to live, to be!

 


 Dance with your senses
 Commit to the abandon
 Colour thought in scarlet
 Gold and deep organic green

 


 Revel in the texture
 Wallow in conjecture
 Capture the kaleidoscope
 The hallowed state of being

 


 Dance with your senses
 Extract its very essence
 Inhale the heady fragrance
 Set your spirit free

 


 Unfold like a flower
 Release your latent power
 Awaken you the giant
 Asleep within and be!

Author notes

Written September 9th, 2004

A contest entry

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  • yourbentangel
    November 19, 2007

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    I love to dance and I like the way that you wrote this. I think that you have an innate talent here and when this contest is over I will look forward to reading more of your work.Thank you for entering and goodluck


  • Gwenevere
    November 16, 2007

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    Dancing in any shape or form gives release to the senses.I love to dance and your poem swept me away in time to the music, Ros


  • malkinpuss
    April 11, 2006
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    ea, thanks for reading. I realize not everyone shares the same appreciation..I am sure you discovered that from the comments on your own work. That's cool though, it would be a drab world if we all had the same tastes.


  • burdened
    April 11, 2006
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    powerful

    this is really good, i never thought of dsncing with senses, it is inspiring, and a powerful read, well at least for me! X


  • FloridaGatorQueen silver member
    April 11, 2006
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    This is a very beautiful poem. Never saw dancing described like this before. I could picture this in my mind. Keep up the awesome poetry!!!


  • ea silver member
    April 11, 2006
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    "extort" its very essence doesn't sound like the right word to me here. "extract" perhaps works. I really disliked the huge typeface and felt it detracted from the enjoyment of the read. otherwise I think it's a joyful, uplifting piece.

  • malkinpuss
    April 11, 2006
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    applepie1254, thanks so much for all your kind words ....very appreciated!


  • applepie1254
    April 10, 2006
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    Wow this was very intense with the wording you chose. Great poem! (( +and thanks for commenting on my poem ))

    Your poem really goes well with the title you chose because I could feel the intesity and the emotion in this poem- Thanks for sharing ^_~

    ~erika

  • malkinpuss
    February 8, 2006
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    cafegroundzero, thanks!


  • cafegroundzero gold member
    February 8, 2006
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    Ole'

    Ole'!

    And next we'll have round two:

    Authenticity (Believability or realism) 1 to 20 pts,20
    Theme Clarity (relevance to contest) 1 to 20 pts,20
    Complexity (Work, plan and style) 1 to 20 pts,15
    Transcendence (Artistic conclusion) 1 to 20 pts,18
    Expressiveness (Some say artfully said) 1 to 20 pts =,19
    Audio/Oral (Listening as it's read, allit, asson.) 1 to 20 pts, 20

    Sometimes there's a galloping iamb, other times the rhythm seems to start another way and end with a different, so that the beat is, like a dancer, stomping one way and then switching another to stomp in the opposite direction. The poem has a very dynamic, back and forth feel to it, which is exciting.

    On third round of judging, I brought my lovely assistant, the fair and wee Annie Franck who is 5 years old. If she likes the poem, that counts for something, wouldn't ye say, mates? Now, Annie what do you think of the poem?

    [To be continued as we enter round 3]
    Edited on Feb 12, 1:08 p.m. because 'Applied the standards matrix.'.


  • malkinpuss
    May 16, 2005
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    MistressoftheNight, thanks so much! I thought your contest was full of really cool options and thought this piece would fit right in.


  • Lady-of-Twilight
    May 16, 2005
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    very good

    This has a great rhythm! It was flowing and enchanting. I loved this. Just the whole idea is beautiful. Wonderful job on this. I loved the flower metaphor at the end. Very fitting. Good luck in my contest... it is really starting to heat up!

  • malkinpuss
    February 15, 2005
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    sVentos cruSh, Thanks so much!


  • Amygdala the Tramp
    February 15, 2005
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    I agree with comicrose, especially his word choice for layer of its being; very fitting for a poem with a flower metaphor! Good luck in the contest.

  • malkinpuss
    December 23, 2004
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    Thanks so much cosmicrose!


  • cosmicrose
    December 23, 2004
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    This was a fantastic write on every layer of its being. Worthy of the golden praise indeed!

  • IrisVerde
    October 1, 2004
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    Beautiful

    I can feel it. It is alive and it speaks. It dances in my mind. You can sense it, and it has a rhythm. It is beautiful. Thank you so much for the comment!


  • Mari Goes gold member
    October 1, 2004
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    I really liked this poem! The content and the way ypu presented it. The idea of dancing to be free the spirit is very lovely!
    Thanks for this pleasant read!

    Wishing you well,
    Mari

    member of Peace Chain


  • envinyatar
    September 16, 2004
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    good

    Hey! great job i really liked this, it flowed well and was deep and personal but not so much that the message didn't get across, nicely done. Good Work, and Good Luck!!!

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