I had just seen someone special…
so special…
so loving…
so loved…
Who had nothing more to give…
When last I saw her,
she was lying there,
motionless…
Her body still warm to the touch…
Only a few minutes before,
her heart was still beating…
Her now lifeless body,
was still warm…
I had been outside,
looking at the sunrise…
Where I said:
“Baby, you missed a beautiful sunrise”…
And she seemed to say to me,
these following words:
“No I didn’t, I was here, and enjoyed it with you.”
At first,
that was all I remembered…
But I had lost
a number of minutes…
I honestly do not know,
if she truly spoke these words to me,
or they came from me…
But it seems
I have remembered,
these following words,
as I moved on past
what had happened…
She also seemed to have said…
“You’ll be ok, my love;
just have faith, that I
will be with you always…
I’ll help you through
the toughest times,
for my love,
I did this for you…
“I had no other choice,
my love,
but to go now,
not later…
For you would have given
your all for me,
and had nothing left
for anyone else…
But I would have gone anyway,
it was just a matter of time…
“I couldn’t see forcing you,
to make that awful decision.
For guilt would have consumed you,
as I had seen
so many times before….
“So I chose the path I took,
it wasn’t the one
I wanted to take…
I wanted to come back,
my love,
to you,
for us….
“For now you will come to know
that I love you,
more than
my life itself…
I know, you would also
have done the same for me,
had the shoe been on
the other foot…
“But I had no other choice…
I would go anyway…
It was just a matter of time,
and what it would do to you.”
“So I chose this,
because I love you…
I wanted to make it
as easy,
on you
as possible…
“I know it won’t be easy,
but always know,
I’ll be waiting for you,
on the other side…
When you cross over
that bridge we call
Death…”
© Jonathan Wikkins October 14th, 2001
Revised February 20, 2008
All Rights Reserved
Author notes
This unfortunately, along with all my other pieces having to do with death and renewal is true...
Written October 14th, 2001
there should be a picture and non-site background to go with this piece... if you have to highlight to read please let me know, i think my custom backgrounds aren't working properly
Option 3. A Lament (or a sadness for someone lost, but
not necessarily dead)
In a list
A contest entry
- WHO HAVE YOU LOST? by pappacass.
525 points, ended February 1, 2008, 12 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - loss of love by LanguishedLad.
650 points, ended March 9, 2008, 37 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Four Options/Poetry Prompts by Scion.
800 points, ended April 27, 2008, 9 entries
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Wow this is such an amazing poem. I too am sorry for your loss. Sometimes we all have to do things that we don't want to do, that may change our lives forever, and will hurt us more than we can ever express in a poem, a letter, or even a speech. To tell you the truth the poem was sad, but it didn't make me cry. I cried when I went through your comments and read the one you replied to about your love for your dearly departed wife Carolyn. Also I realize it's been about 6 years and I'm sorry for just finding your poem now in this contest. I hope also that you became the successful writer you were aiming for. You are an extremely talented poet.
,Julie
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I think you captured the feeling and emotions of losing someone you love very much in a very poetic and appropriate way. Your meaning and intention are there clearly written out in the dialogue. It seems there is a lot of hidden regret there too.. that's at least what I read. Aside from the substance of the poem- I think it was a bit redundant and lacked a focal point. The beginning stanzas were very good time/place setters, but the rest of the poem gets lost in repeated phrases and uneeded words. Also, the contest did ask for less than 40 lines, but even with the length of the poem, you still manage to create a very moving lament. Cheers.
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That was good, I really liked this emotion filled and well written. Keep up the good writing and good luck in the contest john. This poem deserves more applause than I can give it.
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this was so emotional for me....i'm sure you heard the words my brother....i have seen the faces of those i have lost.....must have been hard my man....stay strong until that special day....good luck -
beautiful piece. the sacrifices our loved ones make for us are oflten the most difficult to contend with. best wishes and blessed be.
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((((((((((((Hugs)))))))))))))) we just had a death in our family, and my niece had to make that decision to remove her husband from the machines. But Will in his own time, let go, he waited till Lisa had gone outside to smoke, before he passed. I think he knew if she were there when he passed, he knew she couldn't have handled it. We buried him today at exactly 2:15pm....I have never felt so at a loss for words. I hope truly that I go before my husband, and I know it seems selfish, but I don't think I could bear him going before I. Mike, My heart goes out to you, and I know it is has been sometime since your beloved passed, but this write was beautiful and I just wanted to take a few moments to share with you that sentiment.
Carrie -
oh mike,what a beautiful experience to know she was there with you
you know she did say those words,i am so glad you heard them and shared them with us.
it's not that easy to make that kind of decision,i am glad she made the decision for you.((((((((hugs))))))))))) -
I am so sorry for your loss. I did sort of have the same decision to make for a loved one, and it is the hardest decision of all. You want to be selfish and keep the other person there, but you know you have to let him or her go for their sake as well... You captured it all beautifully in your write. I know your wife is still with you, always
/Jen -
It is good to heal with this kind of thing. You did a wonderful job and I am so sorry for your loss. It must have been so tragic but everything heppens for a reason and now you have a deeper and more gentle character with which to explore your world. And if you have a talent it will be for the greater growth and healing of your own soul. Take care.
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Absolutly wonderful and amazing!
OH WOW Mike!!! I don't know how I missed this one, made my eyes well up in tears!!!! Though you told me this story before, your poetry always seems to make me feel the emotion all the more stronger!!! I am sure you heard these words Mike, she was there with you and still is!!! Just think of all you have to look forward to when you see her again on the other side!!! {{{{{{{{HUGS}}}}}}}}}} Mike! ~Laura
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DON\"T TOUCH IT
Sweet heart this is a very sad time in your life you lost you wife Ilost my very best friend, She was one of the best the world had to give. Just as My husband Lonnie was. but at least they brought us together. so now we can be happy and sad together. but she left us a very speacail gift KIm .This is a great write -
Too many tears Mike - this one touched me so much
~Von~
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Another piece that has me in tears~
There is nothing worse in this world than to lose someone that you love, yet without faith that she is there... things would be so much more difficult and sad for you. I am glad that you at least have that hope that she is there and talking with you and letting you know that she will never leave. That is a beautiful thing.
These lines broke my heart:
I had been outside, looking at the sunrise.
Where I said:
“Baby, you missed a beautiful sunrise.”
And she seemed to say to me,
these following words:
“No I didn’t, I was here, and enjoyed it with you.”
She is there with you and every sunset and sunrise that you look at. She is the rain, the sun, the moon, the stars and everything around you that is beautiful. Take her in... breathe her in.
Loved this poem, yet so very sad.
Much love,
Lady Sarah
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yeah, that was great:)
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Speechless...
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Okay, now I'm almost crying. I am so sorry, but I admire your hope. Great job.
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This piece, bought tears to my eyes... I related to every word of it.... well written....Karen
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This piece, bought tears to my eyes... I related ro every word of it.... well written....Karen
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Its beautiful writing. I'm sorry you had to go through that, but you know that she is there with you. You knew a special kind of love some never experience.
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I'm glad you didn't have to make the decision regarding the machines. But, it's apparent you loved her enough to have turned them off, if the circumstances had been different. SAYING you can do it and actually DOING it are quite different, but like you said, she made that choice for you. Tough day for memories...Good way to get through it by writing. m
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today, at exactly 6:12, MST, will be one year ago, this very event happened... it was at St Vincent's Hospital, Santa Fe NM, i had just talked to my wife... i think she heard me, she was mostly unconscious... i told her i would fight for her, all she had to do was figure out how to let me know... i also told her i would (if she could figure out how to let me know) if she wanted me to... turn off the machines and let nature take it's course...
she gave me her decision... by going forth... taking those awful decisions off my head... Carolyn... you know i will always love you... miss you... and wish it had never happened... but i will move on, as you wanted me to... will i find sucess as a writer?
time will tell, my love, time will tell -
This is so sad and touching. You did a great job expressing your feelings in words with this one. I'm sorry for your loss.
Tina -
think about me everyone...
today is thursday, one week away from that fateful morning, nov 1, the very day this happened... -
'For now you’ll know I love you, more than my life itself'.
This line touched me more than I can express. To give one's own life in order to spare the life and emotions of another, is the greatest act of love I can imagine. I am deeply saddend by your loss, but grateful that you have chosen to share your feelings with us. -
this is very sad. i'm sorry you had to go through this. it was a good poem though. i felt the emotions inside of me as i read it. great job. thanks for sharing it :)
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