FATE. - Wyleian Sonnet XIII
We're born with no remembrance of our past
Nor foresight of our wayward future path.
We know not yet how long our life will last
Or what will happen in the aftermath.
They say our destiny's already planned;
It’s course pre-written in the starry sky.
Existence trickles through like hourglass sand
Irrevocably moved, nor knowing why.
Though we may plot and plan our best endeavours
And think to hold our Destiny in thrall,
Blind Fate with sharpened shears ruthlessly severs
Our best-laid schemes....and nothing comes of all.
For all the skills and labours we would save
Fate buries deep in Death's unyielding grave.
Hugh Wyles, September 6th. 2004.
Author notes
This sonnet is written in strict Iambic Pentameter with rhyming scheme: abab cdcd efef gg in traditional 'English Sonnet' style.
Thankyou Gen for becoming part of my destiny. It was fated.
Written September 8th, 2004
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What a brilliant collobration
I have attempted one sonnet like Maureen and that gave me a headache
You two are something else
Continue on praise be
Love em
Love you both
Hugs
Susan~~~
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Excellent! A pleasure to read!
I've only attempted to write one sonnet (and that was for one of your contests). The two of you have written one of which you can be proud!
BRAVO!
<3 Maureen
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Dear Mary,
This is high praise indeed from a fellow-poet who writes, herself, such beautiful sonnets. Please write us another and share it?
Love and hugs, XXX Hugh. -
an amazing sonnet. this form is my obsession and when i find one so beautifully written i tend to study it. i agree with the content. though we try, plan and work towards our goal (seemingly making good choices) fate comes in and in one sweep can take it all. this is a true. as you say, live while you can. a simply wonderful sonnet.
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I'll never have to sit around and wait
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this is very good. its deep, slightly dark, and amazingly well written.
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Pleasant Surprise
Admittedly, I clicked on this by accident. Also admittedly, I was pleasantly surprised by what this click had found. The rhyme scheme and iambic pentameter really let it flow freely, but yet hold a rhythm within it's words. I particularly like the power of the second stanza, and of the last stanza (the rhyming couplet). Well written.
Lynn xXx
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this is gorgeous. i completely beleive in fate, and this poem was positively beautiful! the scheme of the poem was great, and this whole poem was extremely well written. Gret job and God bless!
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Bravo! Not much more to say, but alas, i love it
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For all the skills and labours we would save
Fate buries deep in Death's unyielding grave.
Wow this is really good...its really truthful...and you can tell that you both know and really care about what you are writing about...its really amazing that you two can be so toghether that you can write a poem and pull it off as one person wrote it...really great job on this!! Thanks for sharing it with all of us!
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Congratulations you two on another gem. This is superbly constructed, but not only that, gives much food for thought. I too enjoy your collaborations and look forward to reading more.
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Dear Saurabh,
Thankyou for reading and commenting. Of course our life is a series of choices, of turnings to left or right, good or not so good. But in the end "the good is oft interred with their bones" and, as Robbie Burns said "The best laid plans o' mice and men gang aft a'glae". Fate, like Time, moves on so live life while you may.
Best wishes and regards, Hugh. -
Dear Mari,
If we can count on you to read our poems (forever?) we will keep on writing them. I'm glad you liked this one and yes, whatever is written in the stars you can still choose what you want to say in your comments!!
Love and hugs, XXX Hugh. -
Joan -
Thank you so much for your wonderful comment. I am really enjoying writing these and it seems that we compliment each others writing well. I am glad you are enjoying reading them, I will try to get by soon to read yours, as I feel like you have been commenting on my poems and I have not reciprocated. Be by soon.
Thanks Again,
Susan -
I agree with you whole heartedly. Though there is a plan for our lives we are given choices. It is within our own hearts that we make those choices and we bear the consequences accordingly.
The universe is not static and neither are our lives. It is when we resign ourselves to a path that we lose complete control.
And thank you for the sweet comment about forever...
Susan -
provoking....
Great work, undoubtedly. I understand the message that there is a control on our lives, beyond our reach, and it changes all that we 'carefully plan'. That should not mean that we resign to fate. I think what most of us fail to realize is that the controls in fact lie deep within ourselves. Fate, just as you wrote, may be dependent on stars; but inside you and me lies an infinite universe, still waiting to be discovered. And when we discover that infinite universe within ourselves, fate is all but a small part of it.... -
I may sound, I knwo I do, repetitive but what else can I say other than oh my, you two did it again!
Our fate may be written in the stars or in abook somewhere, but I still think that we all can control our life somehow. We have choices and those choice lead us into a good or bad path in life. We need to see the difference between the two.
To Susan, how did it come into your mind 'You think they will continue to be read?' My dear, such beautiful and well writeen poems will have an 'audience' foerever and ever!
Beautifully done guys!
Kisses and love,
Mari
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absolutely brilliant
Hugh, you and Gen have created another Masterpiece. The two of you are amazing, your work is simply superb. keep on creating these wonderful Wyleian Sonnets. Simply magnificent~Hugs to you~Bea
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Hugh-
It would seem fate that we should meet here over the miles. I look forward to each and every time I sit at the computer and compose with you.
This friendship-collaboration has brought so much to my days. I hope that we can continue with our Wyleian collaborations forever... You think they will continue to be read?
I enjoyed being a part of this write of yours as always..Now it is my turn to post...
Your Forever Gen
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