I'm still the same as I always was
Right?
I ponder this as I eat my pathetic ice cream
Sitting at the shoreline
I feel like such a stranger to myself
But I'm not alone, here in my car
There's my music, of course
As well as my dog
It's been a while since I was here
A long, long time
It's not my favourite spot, but oh well
I'm still watching the sun
Still asking its forgiveness
Cos I haven't spent as much time with it as I could have
Things stood in my way
Yes, I know, that's just an excuse
But it can't be helped
I can hear my dog getting anxious behind me
She's scared, she wants to leave
Just as the sky's turning orange
Maybe it would be best
To watch the sunset at home
There's no water, but I could pretend
I look at my reflection in the rear view mirror
Still pale with despair
Trying to hide the fact
I went back on my meds today
Author notes
Written on 8th September 2004 at 19:45 GMT at the coastline of Portstewart, County Londonderry, Northern Ireland.
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- We all go to sleep in the same place, and in the morning hope that we're all the same. <3 by SarahEatsAirplane.
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this paints such a vivid picture in my mind.
it's wonderful.
this has a bittersweet feeling as you read it, but then it just ends with a BOOM.
and that makes it so intense and leaves a big impact on the reader.
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I give it a 5.8
I suppose that meds are an absolute necessity in some cases, but I do not find them as needed and called for as society would say. Merely an escape from solving our own problems if you ask me. Seems sad that we have gone so far down the perverbial drain that we "need" meds. I will stick with good old fashioned will power and prayer. They have never done me wrong, nor have I ever forgotten to use them. Good write, just not my kinda topic I guess. I am sorry, my intentions were not to overshadow your talent with arguement. Keep up the good work! -
This has a lot of great imagery, but it seemed to lack emotion. I think this could be a lot more emotional, and the description of the sun could be more vivid. This is good, but i think it could be amazing. Feel better, thanks for sharing, and entering the contest.
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hmm..this was nice..theres a sense of you being relaxed yet depressed at the same time..it shows nicely through this poem..thank you for entering and good luck
psycho -
beautiful job here- the feel of 'every day-ness' it gave off in the beginning made a very relaxed and peaceful feel. an exceptional write, thank you for entering. best of luck,
Jen -
Okay, well i liked your peice. Good luck
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Finally, I was gonna review you early, but I had forgotten if I had or not and if I did I didn't want to review twice and make it seem like I fave you to the other people, so now I finally say something about it....I loved the ending in this. Your poem was so suspensful and I was hoping that it wouldn't be a sucking ending and it wasn't, it was a good ending...well if your meds are bad for you then I don't mean the ending was good cuz then you were in pain...I need to shut up I know I am confusing you! what I am trying to say is that you were great! Good luck in the contest
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Hopefully by being back on your meds you won't be so depressed as last night hunny. Meds aren't always a good thing, but they aren't bad either. I hope you feel better Duckie. Much love
*~Rosey~*
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