quietly you came
and stole
these things from me:
the feet from my heart
the dew from my lips
and the ink from my hand
and yes, king of thieves,
also the sleep from my body
but oh, I am blessed
for in this condition of lessness
sound the trumpets of oneness
you carry my heart amongst butterflies
bedew my lips with wine of light
(oh, I am so drunk with you
I cannot find the way to my mouth)
and with these hands,
with this body
awakened by you,
I write you against the sky
with the ink of light
with the panting cries
of all fires
so that all can read that I love you
in the shadow of butterflies and light
yes, until the last trumpets sound
and the flowers grow over me
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Written September 8th, 2004
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Thank you, Dee - you are too kind...!! ~
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Wonderful
Oh this is so beautiful... I feel that the one I put in is childish beside this one... You did a wonderful write here. Dee -
Thank you, slipknotpoet666 for your lovely comment. Best wishes ~
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This is really beautiful.. YAY! I love the imagary I get too. Fantastic write! Keep writing and have an uber shiny day!
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Thank you, Deena - much appreciated!
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Congrats on your SILVER...you deserve it.
Deena
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Ashley, thank you for your lovely comment - best wishes!
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This is beautiful. There's something old about it. Like Shakespeare almost...very clever, especially with the theives part.
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wow I love this poem, its so sweet and touching. I can really relate to this, and you have a wonderful way with eords, well done
louise
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This piece is a true dedication to your love....i liked the flow and the emotion you put into it. Well done on captivating your readers.
Good luck in the contest and keep writing.
Countrybabe 
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awesome poem, great scheme of things! Good luck with the contest
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Beautiful write. I'm speechless. This was amazing.Steve is very lucky to have you.Thank you for entering my contest.Good luck to you.
Ashley
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What a beautiful tribute to your Steve....does he know what a treasure he has in you?
Good Luck.
Deena
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Liz, thank you...for the lovely comment and for bringing a smile !
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This is beautiful...I always love your work.
It is so soft and flowing. Good luck.
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Tisha, thank you very much for your kind comment! ~
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How beautiful this is....love is grand....this is stunning!!!
Tisha -
As always Nicolette a beautiful write penned by a beautiful soul. The feeling of losing part of yourself to become one with your love is a great thing. Congrats on the bronze, though this was pure gold.
Blessed be
~~Serenity~~
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Thank you very much for your comment and the applause! I understand how you feel - I have a contest running at the moment and I feel exactly the same with each entry that I read. Good luck on the judging ~
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i relate to this poem so well! i swear, every poem i read makes it even harder to choose. i'll comment more in the judging. thanks for entering my contest! from the only:
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this is great! i love this entire piece. it's truly a work of art in my opinion. i'm not good with love poems (in my opinion) so they usually don't touch me but this one did! very nice. keep it up!
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My My My, this says L-O-V-E all over it. Beautiful and written as only you can. The image of a heart being carried amongst butterflies was just breathtaking. Wonderful write hon. I love it.
~Lyrical
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Yep, this girl is in love. Isn't it neat that we are inspired to write by our present circumstances or those we have experienced? When someone writes a poem, it tells you a lot about where they are at emotional at that moment. It's obvious you are in love.
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Thank you Raven Aurora, for your lovely comment. Yeah, this year has not been too good for me as well, but there's always hope, isn't it? I wish you many blessing for the New Year
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excellent
A wondrous blending of options. I have always held the butterfly as a sacred creature, one that will unite lovers near and far. It is very scarce that I find such beauty in a love poem without visiting the doldrums of my broken dreams. This is quite uplifting--something I wish I could've written. I do not get inspired to write about love very much anymore, since I have been deprived of it or any inkling thereof for the past year and a half. Maybe things will get better next year (I'm hoping, anyway).
This is breathtaking. Take care, and I wish you luck in the contest.
Many blessings,
Raven Aurora
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Thank you Shooting Star, for making me smile - take care!
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aww.. this is so romantic.. i truely enjoyed this write! great job! I love the way that you described everything in your poem! Nicely done! good luck in my contest!
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Thanks dear Starynite - I appreciate your comment - good luck and hope you get beautiful love poems to read!
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"you carry my heart amongst butterflies
bedew my lips with wine of light
(oh, I am so drunk with you
I cannot find the way to my mouth)
and with these hands,
with this body
awakened by you,
I write you against the sky
with the ink of light
with the panting cries
of all fires"
this was my favorite part of the story i like it a lot...this was a really good poem..i liked how you describe everything......also thanks for entering me.
Love always and take care
*Starynite*
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"but oh, I am blessed" indeed you are. Very nice words, very touching, very deep.
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"I write you against the sky" - that's one of the most amazing lines I've ever read! The whole poem is gorgeous - it's light and floaty, and really whimsical. Like butterflies!
Thank you for the comment you left me. Congratulations to you, too!
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Thank you so much, TinyDancer (what a beautiful name!) for your very kind comment. I am so glad that I saw your contest.... wonderful - love poems just come naturally to me!
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Wow. Many poems try to describe love but you actually made me feel it. This was just wonderful. Thank you for entering because Im glad I had the chance to read this. Great job!
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Hi Nicolette,
this week I am just under a state of wonderment because of you and Steve...such a rare chance to discover a kind of love like this...that you both share...i am just so in awe! you two made me so lovespell and dreamy eyed...haha...your poetry (Steve and you) spoke of your love...such no ordinary love, so precious, exalted... i am like drifting with butterflies. this time I don't need to read Romance fiction because what I just discovered is real love...you two are just so contagious. And tell you what...do Steve have a clone? naah just kidding...he's one of a kind and he's yours. I wish you with all the love and happiness...and oh this one I like very much!
afriendindeed,
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This reminds me of a Paul Weller song ( one of my musical hero's ). Beautifully written with so much depth - and a very poignant tribute Nicolette. It does sneak up on you suddenly doesn't it ? I loved the ending - made me smile. Die laaste een vir die aand - slaap met n glimlag soos altyd nadat ek iets gelees wat jy geskryf het ( My behandeling van jou taal word al hoe erger - jammer
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Excellent
Written with such a delicate hand to preserve the beauty of the words you scribe upon this page of love. An endearing epistle from a heart that is obviously overflowering with the joys of love.
Thank you Nicolette for sharing your heart with us all.
Take every care,
Sammy
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Lovely Lovely
Very romantic and softly sensual. A treat to the mind and one that is sure to capture that king of thieves without any doubt.
Good luck both of you.
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Stunning you always amaze me
Je'tadore to your exquisite passion
Raining as a first flower born to spring
Your last lines explores the entire meaning of love and loving
Thank you dear lady lark of all our hearts
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the style is so so so good, but the passion in the poem and sheer depth is beyond that. this is one of my favorite things i have read by you, and actually one of my favorites that I have read in a very long time anywhere. amazing piece. much love to you.
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a ship is hardly so
until the wind blows
and so it was
with me a man
until you a woman
took my hand
love steve
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Beautiful...
This is truly remarkable, very beautiful...
I write you against the sky
with the ink of light
with the panting cries
of all fires
Love is such a fascinating thing and you just never know where you might actually find it, but I'm glad to see you two did...
To be able to create such intoxicating words is without a doubt a rare gift that both of you have been blessed with...Excellent write
~Kimberly~
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Exquisite, Nicolette!
Blessings to you both.
~ G
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i love this so much ...... what a sweet joy U are to me. The last verse is overwhelming. be well 2day and know that I love you too.
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