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Joy In The Rain

Another dark night,
another strong storm,
another lonely walk.

As each step passes, I breathe the heavy air.
The thunder and lightning encircles me.
The thoughts and emotions envelop me.

I envision solutions up ahead.
My pace grows faster,
but they seem to stay just out of reach.

I think of a solution within my grasp...
Looking up to the sky, I think of you and smile,
suddenly finding joy in the rain.

Author notes

Second thing written. Came up with it while walking in the rain (again). Once again, comments are encouraged.
Written September 4th, 2004

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  • magicaldestiny
    January 19, 2006
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    i think of people in the rain too. beautiful poem.


  • CoyoteLyle
    October 21, 2004
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    Hehe. Thunderstorms rock. Except when I'm home because my bedroom window leaks.. but, that's off the topic. Lol.

  • Readerrach
    October 21, 2004
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    see? this is what i miss about being in california! i love thunderstorms!! i've gone to north carolina every year to see my grandma (who actually died this year, but hopefully we'll still go in the summer) but i love the thunderstorms out there! and in MN!! i've been there cuz my stepdad's family lives out there..anyway! i'm rambling, i know, and i've written a lot to you today it's fun tho!
    k, i'll ttyl!

  • SweetLorrain
    September 20, 2004
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    It definately painted a picture in my mind. I absolutely love it. You're a wonderful writer.

  • CoyoteLyle
    September 16, 2004
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    Aww.. thanks It sorta paints a picture in my mind too.

  • Loveable Cherub
    September 16, 2004
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    awesomely rockin'

    This one, I might say, does rock. It paints a picture in my mind. I don't think those were your intentions, and I don't think what you thought would match my picture, but I still like it . I hope it rains more up there so you can go on more walks and write more beautiful poems.

    k


  • September 14, 2004
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    awwww. this poem is so sweet...

  • CoyoteLyle
    September 10, 2004
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    Rock on This'n seems to be the crowd favorite. Or... something like that


  • September 10, 2004
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    A

    you're fantastic! man! this is so awesome!

    seriously though, it's also good.


  • CoyoteLyle
    September 7, 2004
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    I thought of "you". It's a mystery. I really don't know (or remember) who I thought of. But, I'm pretty sure it was you. I don't know who else I have to think of...

  • Loveable Cherub
    September 7, 2004
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    I think that this one is really good. I love the repition you chose to use in certain parts. I want to ask who you thought of in the rain...

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