You tell me I must forget about you,
it is the hardest thing I'll ever have to do,
you give no reason for your leaving me,
if you leave you'll break my heart in two.
My mind keeps searching for an answer,
I don't know what I did wrong,
we were so much in love only yesterday,
it's like a dream of a sad love song.
Please don't leave me all alone without you,
how can I face the future without you here,
what do I do with all the love I have,
it is more then I can even bare.
What have you done to me,
I only feel emptiness inside my heart,
please stop saying you no longer love me,
those words are tearing me apart.
We were meant to always be together,
you were the one to take away my fears,
don't tell me it is the end of our love,
please hold me and wipe away my tears,
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Sad memories of my first love. Many years ago.
Written September 7th, 2004
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Hi Barry thanks for the wonderful comment. Now this one was written before I fell head over heels last May. It was only written for a contest, but did feel like that when I had to leave my first husband. It is hard to leave someone you still love but had to be. And my heart finally healed when I gave it all to God last May. Take care my friend. Hugs to you, Sandy
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Beautifully written and flowed like a hymn.
What a picture of absolute desolation you have penned here Dear Sandy, I know that the heart only cracks but it will heal in time. -
Thank you for the lovely comment. This was a time way back when I was your age. I had gone with my first husband all through high school, married, two beautiful childen, nice home, the American dream. But he cheated over the years. I finally wised up after 13 years. That was 30 years ago. I see him at my daughters on holidays, he is still aloser. :0 This was just another poem of my lifetime of memories. Take care, Sandy
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thank you for the comment on my poem. it means alot to me. your poem reflects exactly what hurts me the most. and i keep hoping for that happy ending. but now i'm not so sure if it will come. this is an awesome write and i hope that you don't have to hurt so bad. i'm a set of ears if you ever need to talk as well. so thank you!
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Thank you for taking the time to read my poem and leave a nice comment. I do appreciate the advise. I am really new to writing poetry, only three months. I've been out of school for 40 years so I don't renenber about too many forms. I enjoy writing for my own pleasure right now. I have so much to learn. Take care, Sandy
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The message is clear in your poem and does evoke emotion. It flows lyrically and it sounds most definitely like a song. If I were you, I would experiment with sonnet because I think you would have some great luck with that. The rhyme scheme is somewhat abrasive here but would work very well in the Elizabethan form.
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Thank you for taking the time to read my poem. I appreciate the lovely comment. I guess at my age you expect to have known some sadness at sometime in life. "f Take care, Sandy
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WOW! This was so sweet yet so sad!! The words flowed together so smoothly.....Good luck!!
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Yea what was that song." I AM WOMAN,HEAR ME ROAR. We do survive somehow. Thank you for the nice comment. Take care, Sandy
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I really feel this but really we are women and we can conquere all. You wouldn't believe what you can over come. I have several awakenings and once my husband passed you have to let go. Let go and say good bye
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Thank you so much for the nice comment. Yea it was a sad time in my life, my first marriae was pretty abusive but that was years ago. My life went on and somehow I survived. Now with the help of God I am happy again and know he is there when ever I need him. It does help. Take care
Sandy
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wow, soooo sad. -hugs- I loved the poem though. Flowed well, you are very very talented!!
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I'm glad you liked the poem. Thank you for taking the time to comment. I appreciate it. It was kind of sad but many years ago. Take care, Sandy
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Thank you so much for taking the time to read my poem and to leave a nice comment. I appreciate it. I guess it's easier to love and have losed then to ever have loved before. So thet say
Take care, Sandy
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Yes I do have a new love now and I know he will never hurt me. I am happier now then I have been in years and years and I don't ever think I was ever at peace with my life the way I am now. Love Sandy
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so sad sandy. I know that you have a new love now, Jesus. I know that you will probably never forget that one, but I hope that it gets easier.
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Wow. So beautifully worded. The last four lines I like the best. Thanks for another good poem!
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Ahh.. such sweet remembrance.. life has a way of watching us and letting us remember.. I've just written a remembrance piece myself..
this is nicely done and flowed well
Good luck with the contest
~GILL~xx
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