I'll drink your strength,
I will consume you;
Take from your energies,
So I can smile
And not feel alone.
I'll hack your bones,
I will chew through you;
Bathe myself in your blood
And scream when
I see what I've done.
I'll make up excuses
To justify this;
Then debate between
Self-destruction
And heartfelt guilt.
In the end I'll drain you,
Yet you'll leave
With fragments of my heart,
Adhered to you
After squeezing it dry.
I'll beg for your essence
Then realize
I deserve this payback;
And I'll watch,
Contain the tears.
I'll sit back and smile,
Savor memories;
For the feelings were true:
The one who kills
Is the leech within.
Author notes
Sometimes, the need for love and affection is too strong...
Written September 6th, 2004
A contest entry
- Poets Without Tropies by Itadakimasu.
300 points, ended October 12, 2004, 43 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Amazing use of imagery in this poem.Wonderful.Keep it up.
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this was a great poem...shows a lot of emotion from the writer and it just put a picture in my mind. very well done
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Very awesome poem! Wow , you just wrote this so well, the word choices were great. "Adhere", "savor", "fragments", not very common words in a lot of the poetry I read. So my hats off to you for that. Plus, generally if I do see words like those, people don't seem to know what they mean; you did however, and incorporated them beautifully. The title for this is great, and very appropriate to the poem. The comment above summed it up very well: "No daisies and fluffy bunnies in this poem" and that is why I love it. You wrote a dark poem without saying "Oh pity me! Woe is me! I have to go kill." Great job, and thank you for the comment on my rain poem.
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woah, that was a great one! Are you speaking of YOUR inner leech? or draining other's energies? it seems like both...very good.
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I can really relate to this poem...its scary, how some people can express feelings so well--this was a quick read, which I really enjoyed, because long poems sometimes make my mind wander--Overall, lovely work! lol, I realize I've been slightly rambling, but you really did a nice job on this
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Cool beans
Verry good, But I like most poems that are like mine.Dark weard and a little sick. Any way its good keep it up. -
When I read your author comment, it made me think of a friend of mine. She's a really good friend of mine, don't get me wrong, but she is (and she knows she is) very possessive. When she heard that 2 of our other friends were going out, she wanted them to split up at first just because she didn't like being second, even though she doesn't fancy him. Or so she tells us. I'm starting to doubt it, even my parents suspect. It's a very true message in the poem. And, as you can see, the shameless thing worked! I commented!
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Remind me never to make you angry. So what happened, someone short change you at the grocery store?
Well if you intended it to be dark--it's dark. And if you intended it to be violent--it's violent. No daisies and fluffy bunnies in this poem. It's about love you say--well its a soul usurping kind of love--more like megolomania I think--and vivid and interesting poem--thanks for letting me drive through.
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Deep
Whoa. That was deep. And really really personal. Wow. You chose some really powerful words, there, it was quite touching. Great job putting the poem together, it was really inspiring. I think I'll go write now. Keep up the good stuff.
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Wow- good imagery, this was a mix between saddness and anger, I feel. I liked it a lot- so wonderfully written Keep writing, this was great
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let the blood run clean
*shudders* i can tell something big happened... great use of imagery in your words
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