I'll be your bloody cloth
I'll be your bloody wrist
I'll be your bloody knife
I'll be your bloody kiss
Whenever you need to bleed
Whenever you need release
I'll be there to stroke your arm
Making the bloody cuts cease
When you need to cry
I'll be your crimson tears
Cut my skin, I'll bear the pain
I'll take away your fears
If you're angry, cut me
Slice my arms and my face
I'll be the silken skin that,
With your blade, you can trace
My blood can take the place of yours
My skin can be your skin
My lips can be the stroke of a knife
A softer touch, unlike your sin
I'll be the bloody need you have
The bloody tourniquet that you need
I'll be that bloody life you take
The bloody corpse; it's guaranteed
Author notes
When I wrote the first stanza, I was thinking of a poem called 'Blood' by White Dragon. Go read if you like stuff about blood.
Note: Don't cut. Seriously. Ever.
Written September 5th, 2004
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Gorgeous. The background is very appropriate as well. As a former cutter I know what this feels like and it feels shitty. I'm hoping you don't feel like this because You're a wonderful person. I don't know if you remember me but your heart truly shines.
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love it. i can completely relate with it.
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This is intense... such an amazing write, it really does show a loving caring relationship in a strange way... I get confused easily but I think I understand the intensity of this. Well done. xxx
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the first one ive read from u and i like wat i read
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I like this one, I can relate to it easily. Keep up the good work
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Such a compelling line - "My lips can be the stroke of a knife" ... I once sat outside in the complete and total stillness of the night. I was suddenly startled by a sound - it was a single falling leaf - Breathless and in awe I followed it's journey... - your poem reminds me of that experience. Thanks for sharing.
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good
yor poetry is great i really like it i used to a girl who cut -
I am not into cutting poetry.. however this piece reminds me of my relationship with my husband. It goes both ways and we have become so much to each other... more than can ever be explained... this really touched me... especially for a cutting poem.
Wonderful job.
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yeah again
more like a vampirey dark bloody thing i liked it when you stucked to flowers -
This poem somehow hit me deep inside, like you read my soul somehow and wrote this. You should write more poems about blood and corpses! XD
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Thank you for your kind words. I wrote this on a whim one day, but if it was possible, I'd do it in a heartbeat.
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Wow this poem is one of great emotion and love, to feel that you could really do that for someone. It's majorly depressing but at the same time it made me feel the great love behind it. Thank you for sharing it.
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wow very good job.
Jessica -
it comes off feeling a bit like a song- but it's very well written.
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a great poem.verry well written thanks for posting on mine
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First off.... font needs to be lighter. Annoyingly hard to read. Don't like the use of the word "blood" so often. Actually, I prefer these types of poems to be written without that word all together, simply because that's such a typically over-used word when found in the self-mutilation/ self- harming poetry. This read as more a song than a poem. Had a nice beat, just couldn't really appreciate the language here.
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Although I'm not a fan of the 'bloody/cutter/bleeding' poetry, lol, I must say that I found the fourth stanza to be rather haunting and sinisterly wicked, lol. There was surprising grace and power in this piece, and even though, like I said, I'm not a fan of such subjects or even the imagery attached to such themes, I will say that overall, I did like this. One quick suggestion though...I think it would've been easier to read this if the lettering hadn't been so darn dark!
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congratulations! you have landed in the finals...a few things you should know: 1. the topic is "a loss of breath" run in any direction with that...creativy is much welcomed 2. you MUST put FINALIST somewhere in your title so i know which poems toskip and those to read...3. prewrites are not allowed...congratulations once again and the best of luck!
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ahhhh this i like...very nicely written...such emotion...especially the first stanza...its nice...good luck and thanks for entering!
anyonita -
beautiful dark masterpiece
beautiful and dark,a gothic romance.
blessed is the tortured soul that is bestowed your companionship
to give one's flesh and spirit for anothers pain,truely a dark angel in a world of pitch.
-cheers
Edited on Oct 06, 5:31 because 'i am the typo master'. -
wow that was powerful
such emotion, such passion, such bloody-ness, such slicein, cuttin, tracing, such friendship or love in this bloody poem awesome work
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