There is, there is
a twisted, mathematical beauty
somewhere in here.
Maybe in the reflection of
these words in slightly puzzled
eyes. Maybe the tangled
and asymmetrical text is a
contemporary portrait of a
contemporary view of fractured
living. Maybe this will
run together with other
streams of consciousness
and fill a sea which we
may sail on
and become enlightened,
or become poets.
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Hooray, easily the most pretentious thing I've even written. Bit silly generally really.
Written September 6th, 2004
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"...Maybe the tangled
and asymmetrical text is a
contemporary portrait of a
contemporary view of fractured
living...."
That was my favorite part of this poem....it's just so....i don't know....there's just something about it.... -
I like these types of poems that are reflective of its own nature. Interesting that you talk about mathematics. I've often equated writing to a math equation. That when I write there is a perfect sentence, a combination of meaning, words and rhythm that needs to be solved. I especially liked "streams of consciousness
and fill a sea which we
may sail on" -
lol interestingly done. great write. anya
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Wow that was reallly pretty i like it a lot and liie your choice of words too!
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Nicely done
"and become enlightened,
or become poets"...Indeed! -
Swell
lol, great. I loved the use of vocabulary, and also repitittion (i.e. contemporary, maybe) all very nice. The last two lines were the best, it really makes the whole poem just come together perfectly. and btw, are you perhaps a jack off jill fan? (well, i ask because of your killer name)
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