To many thoughts mixed in one head
But only one screaming” I wish I were dead”
Releasing pain through the scars she makes
Dieing inside with her heart that breaks
She couldn’t give a fuck what the hell they have to say
She’s been waiting so long for her last day
To live and to release her pain
She won’t listen to them she thinks “there’s nothing left to gain”
The scars that cover her, show the pain in her life
This last mark, she’ll make with a knife
She will shut the door as the tears fall
This last mark will “cover” it all
She holds the knife to her pale skin
She stops to think of her future sin
She stops to think of all her friends
But she doesn’t care here comes the end
Sin….she thinks….I’d rather burn in hell
A friend….she thinks…they hate me I can tell
What do I have to loose?
Who would even care?
If I were to die
If you where to wake, and I wasn’t there
You would cry for a day, and you’d be over me
But I cry every night; I want you to see…..
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Written September 6th, 2004
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This is a vey deep poem and for me it hits home strongly. I have bee cutting for years, i just have so much i my life i never saw as a god thing until now. I mean i has taken alot of help from my friends and all those that i am close to. Yet I have had a friend kill himself on me and the only thing i had there fo me was a knief. It is hard to help someone in that place, be there and proveyou care and if you are not enough then there was nothing you could have done to stop it in he frst place. I am sorry for this lost and struggle. Keep on writing.
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Wow... this is great, There is so much emotion behind it, yet it doesnt come off as one of those extremely depresseing poems.... if that makes sense, lol.
I like the words that you used, the structure of the poem, well formed, and it flows nicely.
You would cry for a day, and you’d be over me
But I cry every night; I want you to see….. --- Love how you sumed it all up!, those 2 lines really just hit you.
Amazing write, your very talented!
-M
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it isn't good thought or nice words to say. just keep it a fiction and not reality.
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great
I love this poem, keep writing, this poem is something else, i love the rhymes and the ways you have the poem formed good job! -
hello ma'am...that was not a very nice poem! i did not like it!! lol. i mean it was super writing and all, but what it was about i do not apporve of! well yes, i must be off. keep writing! love you.
~tamera~
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