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Lost within myself

Spiraling down a dangerous ditch
Doomed to repeat mistakes
Mountains of anger build
Buried in a valley of my own making

Tiny hands and tiny claws
Clinging to childish dreams
Demanding attention angrily
Always seeking solutions

Time mocks and maddens me
Managing my mind and soul
Sucking sorrow sours life
Leaving lesions of lost

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Written September 5th, 2004

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  • queen Moderators member
    October 13, 2004
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    This sounds like your children are small, demanding all of your attention all the time. You feel like you have lost yourself. As they get older and demand less attention it will get easier i think. You said a lot in this poem. Take care Queen