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She's...

 




She’s spiraling curls

 

That leave me rapt

 

Round fingers

 

That dance through my soul

 


She’s brown sugar eyes

 

Melting away doubts

 

 Leaving me

 

Dripping with desire

 


She’s crimson lips

 

With honeydew kisses

 

Sighing rapture

 

and screaming fire

 


She’s broad shoulders

 

That carry weights

 

Of sorrows faced

 

Too heavy for a man

 


She’s supple arms

 

And silken skin

 

That comfort children

 

And mesmerize men

 


She’s brazen breasts

 

Thrusting peaks

 

That nourish love

 

And covet bliss

 


She’s slender waist

 

And copious hips

 

Where pleasure thrusts

 

And gardens grow

 


She’s a gentle swell

 

As her stomach yearns

 

For fertile seeds

 

To procreate

 


She’s shapely thighs

 

Spread wide for life

 

That clench when agony

 

And ecstasy arise

 


 
She’s slender calves

 

And feet of gold

 

To carry her

 

Throughout the years

 


She’s a woman

 

Head to toe

 

Strong and sinuous

 

Imperfect and pure

 


She’s all that…

 

             and more




Patricia Gibson-Williams

Author notes

I don't know if this is what you were looking for when you asked to describe a womans body... but I got the idea from "My Joe"  He loves woman, all shapes, all kinds, and I thought about some of the things he's said when he talks about my body, imperfect as it is.  ~ Patti ~
ABBEY OWNS THE WORLD

Written September 5th, 2004

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  • onerios13
    September 5, 2004
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    Overall I was quite enchanted with this piece, and absolutely fell in love with the first four stanzas...but then I feel the rhythm had faltered and it distracted me from feeling the same rapture as I had first experienced. But in terms of descriptions, in the ethereal grace of the moving woman's body, this was certainly a wonderful example and one that you should definitely be proud of! lol


  • September 5, 2004
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    wow...great description. but i personally dislike the background. it's such a little thing, but i dont usually critique, and i see all sorts of people saying they want honest critiques, so here i go: i dont like ballerinas
    it's all good though, the poem was great, just the background distracted me


  • Tiphanie
    September 5, 2004
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    Great poem

    She’s crimson lips


    With honeydew kisses


    Sighing rapture


    and screaming fire

    I liked these lines best. I hope you do well in the contest...and this poem is a perfect example of what a woman really is...i liked it alot!



  • Just Another Star
    September 5, 2004
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    I like it. Its very discriptive. Its also true about some womens bodies. No matter how imperfect they are, someone always thinks your gorgeous. Nicely done!
    -Sarah-


  • Katie Bear
    September 5, 2004
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    amzing, great descriptions and imagry love it

  • Nicole Hanna
    September 5, 2004
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    I envy her, whoever she is, to be detailed so exquisitely. The poetry is good, and it's refreshing to see that it wasn't handled with rhyme. I see too much that as of late, and it's getting predictable. Thank you for surprising me.

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