All my life you were there for me
but now I suddenly see
a change in you
Does it mean nothing the things we’ve been through?
Now all you care about is shoes
I have no friends so I always lose,
they let me walk with them just because of you
would it make a difference if only you knew?
How I would love to go back to when it all begun
when we're were both young enough to have some fun!
You’ve changed into a person with bad mood swings
Not only that, we’re interested in totally different things
what happened to your childhood you grew up so fast?
The youngest, we are always last.
You grew up quicker that me
But that’s the way it has to be.
Author notes
sanity!
Written September 5th, 2004
A contest entry
- Helping (Contest) by Mari Goes.
500 points, ended September 27, 2004, 5 entries
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awww. awesome writing Jo. Add this to your list of talents
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Growing up is really hard, a great subject to write about. The pains of someone drifting away as they grow is even harder. I cant rhyme for beans, so you already, at tweleve, excell in this area. Excellent job!
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good
i like it. it's something that everyone can relate to, feeling left behind or the same when everyone else was different. keep writing.
Elayna -
i love the flow and the rhyme is pretty good
hehe know what you're talking about in this too, lol. keep on hanging on 
nice write
-taori -
This is a very sweet write...Growing up is hard...Things change, our friends change...Nothing stays the same and sometimes it is easy to roll with the punches and sometimes it hurts...Sadly it continues all your life and you will outgrow my friendships as time goes on...The nice thing is that eventually you can go back and rekindle old ones and sometimes discover something really nice and new. My best to you.
Victoria Lin -
Oh, I knew that feeling so well!
Some friends want to get older too fast...I guess that they miss the best part of being a child.
I saw the first draft of this poem. The content stays the same, the changes weren't that much, and yes, it is a good poem! You have done a very good work and I'm sure you'll improve each day more and more.
Thanks and good luck in everything you do!
Mari
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This about me you say?
I am despicablised. You're so weird.. 
hehehe. I'm so mean but you were mean about me in there! "The youngest, always last" Yeah.. whatever, you're spoilt! And of course I grew up quicker than you? I am older than you... 
You're silly, but good luck
Jewls xx
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