You and I together, feels just right
Come to me and I will hold you tight
So take my hand
Let’s make this leap together
If you ask
I’ll be right here forever
And in my arms you’ll find
A peace you’ve never known
Just close your eyes real tight
It’s time… it's time for us to go
So take my hand
Let’s make this leap together
If you ask
I’ll be right here forever
And in my arms you’ll find
A peace you’ve never known
Just close your eyes real tight
It’s time… it's time for us to go
You and I together, feels just right
Come to me and I will hold you tight
Take my hand, let’s make this leap together
If you ask I’ll be right here forever
And in my arms you’ll find
A peace you’ve never known
Just close your eyes real tight
It’s time… it's time for us to go
Yes, if you ask
I’ll be right here forever
Oh come with me, I will take you home
Come with me, yes, I will take you home
Come with me, and I will take you home... ooohh home
Author notes
Fiddling around with an idea for a song
Written September 5th, 2004
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Anna, I love this poem mainly on two accounts: 1st. “you epitomize love's difficulty” with the allegory phrase: "leap." And secondly, you ascribe love “to the welcoming of your love home.” This was brilliant in your analogy, rhyme-“and “charismatic in it's depth of dimensions!” Bravo..., I loved this-!
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There was no harm taken, I think that poetry is one of those things that each person can read into what they wnat. I am very greatful to have you comment on my work.
Anna -
taking a relationship ahead, adoption, and a suicide pact. three poems for the price of one. wow! please forgive my audacity, but just wanted to share my thoughts earlier didn't mean any harm. can see where you're coming from though. . . finally
thanks
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Thank you for stopping by melphleg, That is a perspective that I wouldn't have thought about. I do so appreciate you taking thew time to read my work.
Anna -
This is a song about a relationship just getting past the beginning and really taking off. I think that each person, however, should interpet it in their own way. Thank you so much for stopping by. I do reread it when you feel better.
Hugs
Anna -
This is a poem about a relationship becoming more serious. It was never meant to be about a suicide pact. But the beauty of poetry is that each reader interpets each piece in their own way. Rarely does it reflect the authors intent. And that is okay. Thank you for taking the time to read it. I really do appreciate it.
Anna -
Awww, it's so sweet. I presume it's the idea of a relationship becoming more serious, although the suicide pact idea of lifeisskarela's intrigues me...
Lovely flow, bet it would make a great romantic song, maybe a tearjerker. Well written.
Lynn xXx
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Sometimes I read lyrics and think okay it was ok but if the music was with them I wouldn't bother listening to the song. I think sometimes the thing with a song is the lyrics... This very beautiful and has such a soft feel to it.
LOL at the suicide pact... I guess words can be taken in any way
Natalia -
I think thatyou could turn this into a great song--It really did have a beat to it. I really enjoyed reading it and think that it would sound very good as a country song.
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Maybe it's just the frame of mind i'm in, but this sounds more like a suicide pact by lovers with a promise of sweet and eternal togetherness. but then that's the beauty of all poetry. it's colourd by the reader's experiences and may mean different things to different people. will come back in another mood, just to check my theory
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To me it seems to be a song about adopting a child. At least that's the picture I get as I read. It's a beautiful song. I'd love to hear it with music. Too bad this site doesn't let sound be put on pages.
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Fantastic Job! Terrific
I truly enjoyed this one. Very mellow,calming and does make you want to hum. Just a beautiful love song. Thumbs up here! Keep at it, this is a winner! God Bless, long time since I've been around. So, sorry, I miss all my friends here at AP! Terrific work!
prairiegal
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A very sweet song. Keep sharing. La x
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oh I love this. It's so sweet
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my girlfriends outa town, i wisah i could be there with her and bring her home, she means the world to me, and i want to make sure she gets home safewly...
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Now that was just lovely. Very soothing and filled with sweetness...can definitely see this set to music, lol. Very nicely done.
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i'm with artis...i'm just humming a tune to go with this and feeling the need to hear an orchestra with this...haha, anyway, very well written, and i love the idea of this...such a sweet song...very nice job!!!!
Mollz -
Incredible
Oh I liked this. It's so pretty and serene. There's almost an undercurrent of promised passion that runs deeper than the words...
Wonderful song. Thank you for sharing this.
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mmmmm...I am humming away over here and it is urging me to pick up my baton and direct an orchestrated explosion of sound and rhythm to go along with the lyrics above, so very nicely wriiten, and i truly enjoyed it ...Artis
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