Stained by blood
Stained by lust
Men this woman
Can never trust
Stained by guilt
Stained by shame
This young girl
Is not the same
Stained by hands
Stained by fault
The young woman
Takes each insult
Stained by hurt
Stained by pain
From every time
She was lain
Stained by regret
Stained by love
She gave it all
She's a red dove
Stained by violence
Stained by lies
She gave her heart
It bleeds, it dies
Stained forever
Stained blood red
She bled until
She lay there dead
Author notes
Rose Dark Thorn
Written August 30th, 2004
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A contest entry
- beauty of darkness by darkness is my way.
350 points, ended July 3, 2005, 14 entries
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This is intense, with an indigo and crimson beauty of feathers around the edges for easy landing! The stain of a love gone bad is everlasting some say. This poem is lyrical! Very beautiful, hauntingly beautiful!
Thank you for this entry and I wish you the best in the challenge.
Much Love Always ♥
Granny
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im not the only one that loves this it is the difination of the world realy what is behind the rich and fake smilings -
Wow. I'm surprised that I've never read this before. I like the background, it fits with the poem, of course. ^^;' I also liked the short stanzas, I wish I could write like that and get my point across. =(
Anywho, this poem is beautiful Rose. -
I started writing in 2001? I think. I know I've been writing now for around four years. So...this one is far from my first! 
If you want to see some of my first poems, go to fictionpress. The link is on my bio.
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This is great Rose. Even if it is one of your first. It's like you've been writing for absolutely years! I love this poem.
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Thank you for commenting. It is much appreciated.
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Really amazing and beautiful write! Full of emotion and has a great flow to it! Well done! Good luck in the contest :-)
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Thank you fir your kind words. Good luck with judging.
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wow..this is a really really good write..i love the flow in it and the emotion..thanks for entering
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Thank you. Glad you liked it.
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Wow, this is so dark and well written Keep writing, this was a fantastic poem which I loved
All the best,
Pozo
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I'm glad you enjoyed this poem, despite the repitition and the rhyme. However, this is by no means about me. It ahs nothing to do with me, actually. I'm still with my first love. Never been hurt emotionall or physically by a boyfriend in such a way as this poem expresses. Never been raped, never been physically abused. And yes, 'dove' does have a symbolic meaning. It stands for a pure soul tainted. Anyway, thank you for commenting. I don't suppsoe you're going to read everything?
That's a lot to go through!
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The anguish in this poem shows clearly. There are overtures of betrayal and abuse that have colored your vision. If this is from the heart, I'm sorry you've been through all this. Life isn't fair and that's the way it is, but no one said we have to like it. I did like the way you used the repeated "Stained by" in each stanza (which is saying something since I am not fond of repetition). It helped drive home the points being made. I'm not keen on rhyme because of its tendancy to sound forced. The "dove" line was probably symbolic, but did border on forced given the short line structure of the poem. Other than that small thing for me, I thought this was well done. Enjoyed reading this.
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It is quite sad, but I'm glad you enjoyed it. Hopefully you will find another who will be willing to accept you love.
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Amazing poem, very good write but it makes me sad too... Reminds me of a love that I could never find with a woman that I cared deeply for and loved but whom had so many past hurts she feared to venture her heart more than loneliness... sigh. Anyways keep up the good write!
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Thank you for your comment. I really like this piece because of it's simplicity...I think there is beaty in the words. Thank you for taking the time to read and appreciate it.
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wow, this is a powerful piece, i really like it, it's dark yet somehow beautiful which also seems to be the way i write lately
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this was absolutely beautiful!!! i loved it! it was amazing! Good work! I loved the repetition... it seemed to add a certain something to it... and i love rhyming poems, so that's a plus too. this was great!
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Wow this is very eye appealing when you read it. Awesome rhyme scheme. I can relate so well. Your poem says a lot to me. Keep it up and Thank you for sharing it.
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ooooooh, creepy. Not much I can saw about this, and the rhyming was amazing, awesome. This specific stanza was the one that really captured me:
Stained by violence
Stained by lies
She gave her heart
It bleeds, it dies
I just thought this line came from pure talent. You are a very talented writer, and with poems like this, I know you can go to any lengths with your poetry.
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Terrific Poem. Very sad but gets to the point. Great job. A lot of thought and talent went into this. Wonderful artistic ability. Definately got me at the core. Great job. Keep writing stuff like this and you will make my favorites list! Good luck!
FUNNIESTCRACKER -
tragic masterpiece
a poor soiled soul comes to mind reading this.
a tragic piece,a terrific poem
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GREAT!!
Excellent poem. This one hit home, but I won't try to explain why. It's an excellent portrayal. U can feel the woman's emotions...or maybe I can because I've felt them. Either way, this is a great write and I'm very moved by it. I hope you keep writing more poetry because you're going to be on my favorites list from now on. I don't know who the woman in the poem is, or if she even exists, but she and I are kindred spirits. Thank you for writing this. Live well. -Jessie -
Very smooth flow. I like the poem's content. Dark and sad too...
Well ritten, as such i would expect from you.
~Brad -
beautiful and awesome
wow,
thats like the best word I can describe for this, lol. this is so awesome, I mean it describes this girl so well and stuff and you can tell what she has gone through without like reading her entire life story, this is really good, I enjoyed reading this. Great job and keep writing.
Heather
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