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Penny Farthing.

Penny Farthing, t'was what I had,
an Uncle's Uncle, or was it
his dad? Gave it to me one
summer's morn;
said he had had it since
he was born.

Oh how I rode it, far and wide;
O'Er hills and dales, rambling
countryside; Fell off a few times
when all's said and done, hurt
more than pride, my poor
battered bum.

Met my first fella, upon my
bike, he had some fancy kind
of kite; Purple and green with
a Dragon on it, tails flying freely
with bows upon it.

I cycled madly with him in tow,
he grabbed the dragon and off
we did go.
Over the tussocks and under the bridge
up the great meadow and over the
ridge.

There we shared sarnie's,
tinned ham or roast Beef, balm cakes,
sliced cheddar and a mug of cold tea.
Blackberry gatherings, we frequently went;
Picking and gathering until we were spent.
The long journey homeward, was carefully done,
all owing to tiredness and my poor aching bum.......

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Written September 4th, 2004

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  • cutiepie gold member
    September 8, 2004
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    Thank you , I had great fun writing it


  • truembrace
    September 8, 2004
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    This was so very cute and I thought you did a wonderful job with just the right amount of descriptions and imagery and rhyming. This kind of writing brings a certain kind of cheerfulness to the page that leaves us smiling as we finish. Really an adorable piece.


  • cutiepie gold member
    September 5, 2004
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    Thank you Pierre, I am glad you enjoyed this poem, your comments, are greatly appreciated, thank you


  • cutiepie gold member
    September 5, 2004
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    Thank you


  • cutiepie gold member
    September 5, 2004
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    Oh ! thank you I am glad you enjoyed it, I had fun writing it


  • cutiepie gold member
    September 5, 2004
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    Glad you enjoyed this Thanks for the kind comments,


  • Pierre Richards
    September 5, 2004
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    excellent!

    The childhood pleasures of play!
    Wonderful memories shared here in this write!
    So cheerful and vivid with a good does of humor thrown in for good measures!
    I loved this trip down your memory lane!

  • Nicole Hanna
    September 4, 2004
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    This was sweet and made me smile. I loved the way the rhyme was handled. It's not your average at-the-end-of-the-line rhyme, so it kept things interesting. Wonderful writing.


  • onerios13
    September 4, 2004
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    Utterly delightful and soothingly sweet! lol After reading some emotional pieces that really put you through the tearjerk wringer or filled with you unutterable angst, it was LOVELY to be able to smile at such a whimsical poem, lol. For the light imagery, frothy stanzas and cute as a bug story, I give you a dozen butterfly wings and a fairy's ring, lol.


  • artis
    September 4, 2004
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    what a picture it makes him on the handlebars and ytou pedaling furiously as the kite was draggin in the wind, and then the picnic together on a windy hill and the shared joys of youth, in the familiar places you love...Artis


  • cutiepie gold member
    September 4, 2004
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    Thank you I am glad you enjoyed it

  • fredhib
    September 4, 2004
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    its a nice summerry write full innocence and brimming with sweetness - i like it smiles from me


  • September 4, 2004
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    The rhyme is very very very interesting!
    hehe this is just uplifting in a way..isn't it?

    I enjoyed reading it very much

    Thanks for sharing cutipie!

    thanks for sharing
    keep writing
    and keep this kind of wonderful work up!

    -->there is no mearef


  • cutiepie gold member
    September 4, 2004
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    Thank you Bill, I am glad you enjoyed it


  • sidewinder silver member
    September 4, 2004
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    smiles
    memories are worth all the gold in the world!
    and you've reminded me a few of my own.
    Thanks!
    I did enjoy this!
    Keep penning on one stroke at a time!
    Bill

  • cutiepie gold member
    September 4, 2004
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    Thank you so much for pointing out the error, I have corrected it I am glad you almost laughed a smile is worth a fortune
    Edited on Sep 04, 2:38 p.m. because ''.


  • Circuitsboard
    September 4, 2004
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    Cute. I smiled. I almost laughed. Very cute, and it recalls memories of years past.
    One thing, I believe "in toe" should be "in tow".


  • cutiepie gold member
    September 4, 2004
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    Thank you Made me smile, dont quite know where it came from thanks for your comments, they were appreciated

  • i luv cupcakes
    September 4, 2004
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    LOL this is hilarious! I like it alot. Excellent job. Best of luck in the contest!

    Kayla

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