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Tear it...

stab my heart,
tear it apart,
not much remains,
only all my pain,
all my screams,
and shattered dreams,
all my tears,
all my fears,
all my blood.

stab my heart,
tear it apart,
stab my heart,
tear it apart,
stab my heart....
tear it apart....

what would happen if i died tonight?
everything seems would be alright...
what would you do if i died tonight?
that's right.. in a few your alright.

stab my heart,
tear it apart,
stab my heart,
tear...
    it...
      apart...

Author notes

....wasnt sure if i should even post i suck..
Written September 2nd, 2004

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  • Sconeboy
    September 3, 2004
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    Blimey, these are your poems when they suck? If even these poems put me to shame...-_-

    But anyway! Tis strong emotion, certainly...all I wanna know is who's it about. And asides, prolly wouldn't want 'em to tear yer heart out...but hey, it's all about personal preference. Thanks for posting this poem!

  • scorpio
    September 3, 2004
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    hey hey... no one sucks.. least of all someone who can transform feelings into words.. believe in yourself and your capabilities and never let anyone hurt you. If they do, its not love nor friendship.. chin up


  • barefoot contessa silver member
    September 2, 2004
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    This is quite powerful, and if somebody do that to my Auntie Sun. I kick their bootay. I hope everything cheer up.


  • FlawedDestiny
    September 2, 2004
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    If anyone does this to you, I'd really hurt them! Really! Feel better hun. Good poem, you do not suck. Don't say that.
    ~*Destiny*~
    ps NEVER GIVE UP!!!